Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before redecoration and the year after redecoration. The total number of visitors the year before renovation rises upto 74,000, and the year after counts upto 92,000.

The pie chart gives the result of surveys inquiring visitors about their satisfaction with their visit, during the same two periods. The visitors who showed up the year before refurbishment accounts mostly by people who were unsatisfactory with their visit at 40% and followed by visitors who were satisfied at 30%. 5% of the visitors gave no response. The remaining 15% were very satisfied and 10% were very dissatisfied with their visit.

The survey for the visitors who showed up the year after refurbishment is comparatively positive than the year before. 40% of the visitors were satisfied with their visit followed by 35% of the people who were very satisfied. The remaining 15% were dissatisfied followed by 5% of the visitors who were very dissatisfied. 5% people left with no response.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the table and both survey periods, and the figures you report are accurate. You also identify the main shift: satisfaction improved after refurbishment, with satisfied or very satisfied responses rising from 45% to 75%, while dissatisfaction fell. However, the response does not clearly set out these key comparisons in a concise overview; instead, it mainly lists the categories period by period. Some wording also makes the data less clear, such as saying visitors “accounts mostly by people who were unsatisfactory,” which obscures that 40% were dissatisfied. A stronger response would state the overall increase in attendance and the broad change in satisfaction in a distinct overview, then select the most important figures to support it.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response is arranged in a sensible order: it introduces the visitor totals, describes the first survey, and then compares the second period. Paragraphing helps distinguish these parts, and phrases such as “the year after” and “the remaining” guide the reader through the figures. However, the organisation is largely a sequence of category-by-category details rather than a clear overview followed by grouped comparisons. Some linking is mechanical, particularly the repeated use of “followed by” and “the remaining,” and the relationship between the attendance figures and survey results is not drawn together. A distinct overview and more deliberate grouping of positive and negative responses would make the progression clearer and cohesion less repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing the charts, including “satisfaction,” “dissatisfied,” “very satisfied,” and “no response,” so the information remains understandable. There is also some attempt to vary wording, such as “survey” and “inquiry.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for this task: “redecoration” and “renovation” replace the chart’s “refurbishment,” “counts upto” is awkward, and “visitors who showed up” is too informal. “Unsatisfactory with their visit” also uses the wrong form and collocation. These choices limit precision even though the intended meaning is generally recoverable. Aim for standard chart language such as “visitor numbers,” “accounted for,” and “were dissatisfied with their visit.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You produce a mix of sentence forms, including longer sentences that compare survey categories, and the main figures can generally be understood. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “The total number of visitors … rises upto 74,000,” the present-tense verb does not fit the past-period data, and “the year after counts upto 92,000” has an unclear subject and verb construction. In “The visitors … accounts,” the plural subject does not agree with the singular verb; the sentence also becomes difficult to follow as it continues. Articles and sentence patterns are sometimes awkward, as in “5% people left with no response.” Use consistent past-tense reporting and simpler, well-controlled structures when presenting each figure.

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