Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrate the numbers of visitors to ashdown museum during the year before and after the refurbished. The charts present the surveys result of asking visitors, Are they were satisfied with their visit, during the same two periods.

Overall, The information shows some progress before and after in refurbishment and also increase in the numbers of visitors like before are around 74,000 and after that it was recoded approx 92,000.

Firstly,Year before the refurbishment, it was recorded that the most of the people are dissatisfied with the museum arrgments which is around 40%. However, only 30% of people are satisfied. some of them didn't responed like 5%. And those who are very dissatisfied are around 10% and some of them are very satisfied 15% with the program.

secondly, the year after of refurbishment, it shows blossomed in the visitors and as well as in the people interest around 40% satisfied and 35% are very satisfied.in contrast, the unstisfied and very dissatisfied people decline arround 15%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main comparison: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and satisfaction improved after refurbishment. You also report several survey figures accurately, including 40% dissatisfied before and 40% satisfied after. However, the overview is vague (“some progress”) and the account omits the after-refurbishment figure for dissatisfaction’s counterpart, very dissatisfied visitors, and does not clearly compare the two periods across all categories. The final sentence says dissatisfaction declined by around 15%, but does not distinguish dissatisfied (40% to 15%) from very dissatisfied (10% to 5%). The response is 146 words, below the 150-word minimum; the 20 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Add a clearer overview and complete the key comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the two years. This helps the reader follow the broad sequence. However, progression is limited because the report mostly lists figures period by period rather than making direct comparisons between corresponding categories. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “However,” and “secondly” are used, but some connections are unclear or mechanical; for example, “in contrast” does not clearly identify which figures are being contrasted. Punctuation and spacing also interrupt flow, as in “Firstly,Year” and “satisfied.in contrast.” Group the positive and negative responses and compare before with after, using clear links such as “whereas” and “by comparison.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “visitors,” “surveys,” “dissatisfied,” and “refurbishment,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less clear. “The charts present the surveys result” would be more natural as “the charts show the survey results,” while “people interest” does not accurately describe satisfaction levels. There are also spelling errors such as “arrgments,” “responed,” and “unstisfied,” and “blossomed” is too informal and imprecise for an academic report. Use precise terms such as “satisfaction ratings,” “respondents,” and “the proportion of dissatisfied visitors.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and longer sentence forms, and the main message can usually be understood. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, particularly in sentence construction, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “The table illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “during the year before and after the refurbished” uses an incorrect grammatical form. “Are they were satisfied” is also an ungrammatical question structure within the sentence. Capitalisation after commas and full stops is inconsistent, and some sentences run together, as in “very satisfied.in contrast.” These recurring errors sometimes make the reader pause. Practise accurate reporting patterns such as “The table illustrates…” and “The proportion of visitors who were satisfied rose…” before adding more complex clauses.

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