Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrates the number of tourist in a year at Ashdown Musem and refurbished before and after the year.

Oveerall, in both both chart the highest area is covered by the peoples that are satisfied, where as before refurbishment there is large percentage of individuals that are not satisfied. There is a small percentage of public that give no response and that are very satisfied and dissatisfied.

For the year before refurbishment the highest percentage that is observed are those that are disatisfied reaching to 40% where as after shows a significant decrease in valuw which is 15%.

Similarly there is large number of public that are satisfied before but after it goes up to 40% which is a singnificant increase.

There are some visitors that are very satisfied with with musem aornd 15% and after i

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the main contrast in dissatisfaction, noting that it fell from 40% before refurbishment to 15% afterwards, and you report the rise in satisfied visitors to 40%. However, the response covers the task only partially: the visitor total increase from 74,000 to 92,000 is omitted, and the very satisfied, very dissatisfied and no-response figures are not adequately compared. The overview is also unclear and partly inaccurate: “the highest area” being satisfied in both periods does not match the data, since dissatisfaction was highest before refurbishment. The response ends mid-sentence, leaving the after-refurbishment figure for very satisfied visitors unreported. It is also 11 words below the required minimum. Include a complete overview and select the key figures for both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: an opening statement is followed by an overview and then paragraphs about the survey results. Linking expressions such as “Similarly” and “whereas” show an attempt to connect comparisons. However, progression is weakened by unclear or contradictory statements, including the claim that satisfied visitors form the largest group in both periods. Repetition in “in both both chart” and “with with” also interrupts the flow, while the final sentence stops at “after i,” leaving the paragraph incomplete. Group the figures into clear before-and-after comparisons, use each paragraph to cover a distinct set of information, and check that references such as “it” have an unmistakable meaning.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “percentage,” “significant decrease” and “increase,” so the reader can recognise that you are describing survey changes. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling and collocation errors make parts difficult to understand: “number of tourist,” “highest area,” “large number of public” and “aornd” are examples. “Pie chart” is also inaccurate for the visuals, which include a table and satisfaction charts. Aim for precise terms such as “visitors,” “proportion” and “satisfaction category,” and use standard spellings. More accurate phrasing will make your comparisons clearer without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, for example, “For the year before refurbishment … whereas after shows a significant decrease.” This shows some effort to connect clauses, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently enough to make several sentences awkward or unclear. Examples include “the highest percentage that is observed are those,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “before but after it goes up,” where the comparison lacks a clear grammatical structure. The opening sentence also has an unclear construction, and the final sentence is incomplete. Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use parallel structures such as “the figure was … before, compared with … after.”

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