Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

the table give information about number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after it's renovation and pie charts show the feedback of the visitor from the the survey.

Overall, the number of people rise significantly after the renovation of museum and there is increment in the positive feedback after the renovation of museum.

It can be seen from table that 92,000 people visited the library after the renovation, which is slightly higher than those, who visited before it's renovation. Additionally, the number of visitors who hold positive feedback accounted for only 45% befor renovation, but after renovation positive feedback increased and comprised 75% of total survey result.

Furthermore, the number of people who had no response is nearly as same as before museum's renovation. Accordingly, 40% of total porportion were dissatisfied before museum's renovation, which significantly drop and

comprised 15% of total survey result after it's renovation. Similarly, the number of people who were likely to be more dissatisfied drop by half of it's total figure after museum's renovation.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main overall changes: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and positive satisfaction increased from 45% to 75%, while dissatisfaction fell. The figures you give for satisfaction and no response are consistent with the charts. This covers the key features and supports the stronger half of this performance. However, the visitor comparison is not fully reported: “slightly higher” understates the rise, and the earlier total of 74,000 is omitted. The final comparison about very dissatisfied visitors is also vague; state the change from 10% to 5%. A more complete overview and precise reporting of both visitor totals would make the summary more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs of supporting comparisons. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Additionally,” and “Furthermore” help signal the stages of the summary. However, progression is not always smooth: the final paragraph moves from no response to dissatisfaction and then to very dissatisfied responses without clearly grouping the related figures. Some references are also unclear, particularly “the number of people who were likely to be more dissatisfied,” which makes the category being discussed less direct. Organise the details by contrasting positive and negative responses, and use precise references such as “the very dissatisfied share” to make the connections more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “renovation,” “positive feedback,” “dissatisfied,” and “comprised,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. There is some attempt at less common phrasing, but several choices are inaccurate or unnatural: “increment in the positive feedback” and “total porportion” are not idiomatic, while “people who hold positive feedback” is an awkward way to describe survey responses. Spelling errors such as “befor” and “porportion” also reduce accuracy. Prefer standard chart language such as “an increase in positive ratings,” “respondents,” and “accounted for.” Greater precision and more natural collocations would strengthen the vocabulary range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “which” and “who,” and the main comparisons are usually understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, however. For example, “the table give” needs subject–verb agreement, and “the number of people rise” should use a past-tense verb. Articles and possessives are also inconsistent in phrases such as “renovation of museum” and “it's renovation”; use “the museum’s renovation” or “its renovation.” In “which significantly drop,” the verb form should be “dropped.” Review agreement, past-tense forms, and apostrophe use, then proofread each sentence. These corrections would make your varied sentence attempts more consistently accurate.

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