Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

This pie chart showing the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction.

Overall, the satisfactions of client before refurbishment was 74000, while after a year of refurbishment this increased to 92000. the dissatisfied client was 40% while end of the year they improve it to till 15%. However they improve client satisfaction from 30% to 40% and very satisfied to 35%

The result before the refurbishment the dissatisfied, very dissatisfied client, very satisfied, satisfied clinet and no response client. The rate of dissatisfied client was on top 40% where the very dissatisfied was only 10%, satisfied client rate was on second highest rank of 30% while the very satisfied was 15% of the list. Finally no response rate was the smallest of the list was only 5%.

The final result after a year of refurbishment, the satisfied and very satisfied ranking on the top of the list, while having dissatisfied and very dissatisfied list become decrease overall and the no response was remain same. The most popularity of satisfied client was up to 40% on another side the very satisfied client became the 35% of record. However the dissatisfied rate decrease to 15% and very dissatisfied became the least of the record only 5% wether the no response is still remain 5% of the year list.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You report the main changes accurately: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, dissatisfaction fell from 40% to 15%, and the satisfied and very satisfied shares increased to 40% and 35%. You also include the unchanged 5% with no response. This covers the key information and gives a useful overall contrast between the two periods. However, the opening calls the display a “pie chart” and does not clearly introduce both the visitor table and satisfaction charts. The overview is also somewhat unclear: “the satisfactions of client before refurbishment was 74000” confuses visitor totals with satisfaction. To strengthen the response, state the overall trends clearly first, then compare the figures in a more systematic way; some details, such as the rise in very satisfied responses from 15% to 35%, deserve clearer emphasis.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction and overview are followed by descriptions of the before- and after-refurbishment results. This helps the reader identify which period is being discussed, and words such as “Overall,” “However,” and “Finally” attempt to connect ideas. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow, particularly in the opening, where visitor totals and satisfaction percentages are mixed together. The repeated lists of satisfaction categories also make the account feel repetitive rather than comparative. Some linking phrases are awkward or unclear, such as “on another side” and “the no response was remain same.” Organise the response around the main comparisons—visitor numbers, positive ratings, and negative ratings—and use clear references to each period.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “dissatisfied,” “satisfied,” “rate,” and “increased,” so the reader can generally understand the data being described. There is also an attempt to vary expressions with phrases such as “on top” and “smallest of the list.” However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, including “satisfactions of client,” “client was on top,” and “most popularity of satisfied client.” Repeating “client” instead of referring to visitors also reduces precision, and spelling errors such as “clinet” and “wether” detract from control. Aim for standard chart language such as “the proportion of visitors,” “accounted for,” and “the largest share,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with contrast, for example, “However they improve client satisfaction from 30% to 40% and very satisfied to 35%.” This shows some effort to connect related information, and the main figures are usually recoverable. However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries make parts difficult to read. Examples include “the dissatisfied client was 40%,” “the no response was remain same,” and the opening fragment, “This pie chart showing…” The past-period comparisons need consistent past-tense forms, while percentages should be described as proportions or shares rather than as people. Practise complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use a small range of accurate comparison structures such as “fell from…to…” and “rose from…to…”.

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