Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The tabular data illustrate the number of visitors who visit the Ashdown Museum during refurbishment and after completing the work. Pie charts brings out the outcome of satisfaction of tourists.

Looking at the table it provides the information of total number of people who visit it when before the staring of repairing process and after the completion of work. 74,000 tourists are recorded during refurbishment, after completing the process of it the ratio are rise to 92,000.

The pie chart provide result of satisfaction level of visitors. Before the renovation 40% of visitors are dissatisfied with museum. Little less that it 30% were satisfied, but the number of individuals who are very satisfied and very dissatisfied are same at 15%. 5% people did not vote for it. After completing the refurbishment process it change the equation by most of the visitors are now satisfied with it and the figure increase to 40%. the ratio of dissatisfied people are decline decrease to 15%. 35% tourist are very happy with Ashdown Museum. Combine 10% people who are not happy and very dissatisfied with it.

To conclude, the number visitors rise after completing the work and most of who were dissatisfied with it now they are very happy.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both the visitor totals and the satisfaction surveys, and the main changes are generally clear: attendance rose from 74,000 to 92,000, while dissatisfaction fell and satisfaction increased. However, several figures are misreported. Before refurbishment, very satisfied visitors were 15% and very dissatisfied visitors were 10%, not both 15%; after refurbishment, the very dissatisfied share was 5%, so the combined 10% of unhappy visitors is not accurate. The conclusion also overstates the change by saying dissatisfied visitors became “very happy”; the chart shows category shares, not that the same people changed their views. A more precise overview and careful checking of all categories would make the report more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to the visitor figures, then survey results, and finally a conclusion. This gives the reader an overall route through the information. Some linking is effective, such as “Before the renovation” and “After completing the refurbishment process,” but connections can be mechanical or unclear. The second paragraph repeats the table’s purpose before giving its figures, while the final paragraph repeats the general trend without adding a precise summary. Within the survey paragraph, several categories are packed together, making comparisons harder to follow. Grouping the positive and negative responses and using clearer references to each year would improve progression and cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “satisfaction,” “dissatisfied,” and “completion,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “the ratio are rise,” “did not vote for it,” and “change the equation.” “Tourists” is also less suitable than “visitors” for people attending a museum. Repetition of “process,” “work,” and “people” limits the range, while phrases such as “very happy” are less precise than the chart’s category label. Aim for accurate reporting language—“the proportion increased,” “no response,” and “very satisfied”—and check word forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to read. For example, “Pie charts brings out” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “the ratio are rise” has an incorrect verb form. In “after completing the process of it the ratio are rise,” the clause structure is also unclear. Tense use shifts between present and past when describing the completed periods. Practise forming accurate past-tense comparisons, such as “the number rose to 92,000,” and check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly matched verb.

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