Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given table illustrates the total number of visitors to Ashdown museum before and after refurbishment. While these pic charts demonstrate the results of surveys of visitors satisfaction.

Overall, it is clear that the number of visitors rise after refurbishments.And after refurbishment most people are satisfied and very satisfied and dissatisfection level decrease.

Before, refurbishment only 74,000 individuals can visit the museum.In contrast, after refurbishment the number visitors increase to 92,000.Year before refurbishment 40% visitors are dissatisfied and only 15% visitors are very satisfied and 30% visitors are satisfied.While number no response are unchanged.

After refurbishment, very satisfection reviews are increase to 35% and 40 % visitors are satisfied.The most difference take place in dissatisfection reviews.After refurbishment it decrease to only 15% and very bad reviews are also falls to 5% and the number of no response is remain same to 5%. These are some difference in reviews of Ashdown Museum after refurbishement.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the main elements of the visuals and give a clear overall comparison: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, while satisfaction improved after refurbishment. The reported survey figures are accurate, including the unchanged 5% with no response and the fall in dissatisfaction. This supports a strong account of the key trends. To make the overview more precise, distinguish the two positive categories from the overall satisfaction picture and explicitly note that the largest group changed from dissatisfied before refurbishment to satisfied afterwards. The response also reports the main figures, but some comparisons could be developed more clearly—for example, the rise in very satisfied visitors from 15% to 35% could be directly contrasted with the fall in dissatisfied visitors from 40% to 15%. The content is relevant and well selected, though a few points are generalised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the visitor totals and survey results. The sequence from the year before refurbishment to the year after is generally easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “In contrast” and “After refurbishment” help signal comparisons. This gives the report a coherent overall arrangement. However, some connections are awkward or incomplete: the opening “While these pie charts…” is not a complete sentence, and “While number no response are unchanged” is not smoothly integrated with the surrounding information. The overview also combines several points in a compressed sentence. For stronger progression, use complete topic sentences and group the positive ratings together, then compare the negative ratings and no-response figure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfied,” and “reviews,” so the main information is usually understandable. There is some attempt to vary wording, such as “individuals” for visitors and “very bad reviews” for very dissatisfied responses. However, several inaccurate word forms and collocations make the language noticeably imprecise: “pic charts,” “satisfection,” “dissatisfection,” and “the most difference take place” do not express the intended ideas naturally. “Very bad reviews” is also less suitable than the survey category’s wording. Aim to use the chart’s labels accurately and choose standard comparison phrases, such as “the largest change was in the dissatisfied category.” Careful spelling and word-form checking would make your vocabulary more reliable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some sentence variety, including a contrast with “While” and a comparison introduced by “In contrast,” but control is limited and errors occur frequently enough to affect fluency. Examples include “the number of visitors rise,” “the number visitors increase,” and “it decrease,” where subject–verb agreement and verb forms are incorrect. The opening “While these pic charts demonstrate…” is a dependent clause without a main clause, and punctuation is often missing after sentence boundaries, as in “refurbishments.And” and “museum.In contrast.” Articles and sentence construction also need attention in phrases such as “Year before refurbishment.” Practise forming complete sentences and checking tense and agreement; for example, “The number of visitors rose” and “The dissatisfied share fell to 15%.”

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