Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram given below showing different ratios of visitors that come to museum. There is a comparison discussed in the graphs the ratio of visitors before refurbishment and after that there are two pie charts given below and showing several satisfaction catagory of visitors.

Firstly, The ratio of visitors before renovation there is a huge amount of people come to visit museum and they go dissatisfied the ratio of dissatisfaction is greater than others the reason is not figured on the graph only thirty to forty percent visitors go with satisfaction.

Secondly, The ratio of guests is quite increased after the rebuilding the meseum the major change after this is now sixty to seventy percent people go with satisfaction and they have no issue now because of more facilities and cleaniness of every thing the good environment they providing and the better ambiance they are giving

Overall, after the renovation of building the number of visitors increased from 74,000 to 92,000 this is such a vast grown up

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall changes: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and satisfaction was higher after refurbishment. Your comparison that dissatisfaction was greatest before the work and that satisfaction became the majority afterwards is broadly supported by the charts. However, several key details are vague or inaccurate: before refurbishment, 45% were dissatisfied or very dissatisfied, while 45% were satisfied or very satisfied; afterwards, the satisfied categories totalled 75%, not “sixty to seventy percent.” The response also omits the individual category figures and does not clearly report that very satisfied rose from 15% to 35%, while dissatisfied fell from 40% to 15%. Avoid inventing explanations such as improved facilities and cleanliness, which the charts do not provide. A more precise overview and selected figures would strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable overall structure: an introduction, two paragraphs comparing the periods, and a concluding statement about visitor numbers. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Overall” help the reader follow the broad progression. However, the organisation is sometimes mechanical, and the first two body paragraphs combine several points without clearly separating visitor totals from satisfaction results. Some references are also unclear, as in “the ratio of guests is quite increased,” where it is not immediately clear whether this means visitor numbers or satisfaction. The final overview repeats the visitor increase but does not summarise the main satisfaction shift. Grouping the figures into before-and-after comparisons and using clearer links between them would make the progression more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “dissatisfied,” “satisfaction,” “refurbishment,” and “comparison,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “different ratios of visitors that come to museum” is an awkward way to introduce the data, and “vast grown up” does not naturally describe an increase. There are also spelling errors in “catagory,” “meseum,” and “cleaniness.” Use precise chart language such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “rose/fell,” and avoid unsupported descriptive phrases such as “better ambiance.” This would make the vocabulary more accurate and suitable for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, but control is uneven, and errors sometimes make the relationships between ideas unclear. The opening, “The diagram given below showing,” is missing a finite verb; it could be “The diagrams below show.” In “the reason is not figured on the graph,” the clause is grammatically awkward, while “the number of visitors increased from 74,000 to 92,000” is a clearer, well-formed sentence. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “come to visit museum” and the long sentence beginning “Secondly” that runs on without clear punctuation. Practise building accurate sentences around comparisons, using consistent past-tense reporting and checking articles, verb forms, and punctuation.

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