Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart show that surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same periods, different numbers of visitors to ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.

if we talk about year before refurbishment there are almost 74000 visitors that visits the museum.According to the chart very satisfied visitors rate aroung 15% on the other side satisfied visitors ratio is upto 30% that is the impressive ratio.Furthermore,dissatisfied visitors persentage 40% thats actuallly massive,somehow very dissatisfied visitors ratio is only 10% thats not bad.overall some visitors without any response is only 5%.

On the otherhand mesume after refurbishment the ratio of very satisfied visitors increased upto 20% as compare to year before refurbishment.Satisfied visitors also increases upto 10% and currently ratio id 40% satisfied visitors.Dissatisfied ratio brutally increases that is not a good thing its ratio is around 15%.very dissatisfied visitors 5%

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the two periods and report several survey figures, including the pre-refurbishment shares of 15% very satisfied, 40% dissatisfied and 5% with no response. However, key information is missing or inaccurate: visitor numbers are 74,000 and 92,000, but you give only the first and omit the increase; after refurbishment, very satisfied visitors rose to 35%, not 20%. You also do not clearly summarise the main overall pattern: total attendance and satisfaction both increased, while dissatisfaction fell. The response is also below the required 150 words, with 121 words counted (the 30 words copied from the prompt are excluded). Add a clear overview and accurately compare the main figures to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic chronological structure: one paragraph discusses the year before refurbishment and another the year after. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “On the other hand” show an attempt to connect points. However, there is no clear introductory summary or concluding overview, so the reader has to infer the main trends. Several details are crowded into long, loosely connected sentences, and punctuation makes the progression difficult to follow—for example, the first sentence combines the survey and visitor-number information without a clear relationship. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and focused comparison paragraphs. Use linking words selectively and make each sentence present one clear comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing survey results, including “visitors,” “satisfied,” “dissatisfied,” “ratio,” and “increased.” This gives the response a basic range suited to the topic. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or informal, as in “impressive ratio,” “brutally increases,” and “that’s not bad,” which are not appropriate for a neutral report. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “aroung,” “persentage,” and “mesume,” and repeated use of “ratio” makes the description less precise. Choose standard chart-reporting language such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “rose/fell,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts some longer sentence forms, including “According to the chart…” and “On the other hand…,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and the longer attempts are often faulty. For example, “The pie chart show” has subject–verb disagreement, while “there are almost 74000 visitors that visits” contains errors in agreement and sentence construction. Missing articles and punctuation also affect clarity, as in “year before refurbishment” and the run-on sequence beginning “Furthermore,dissatisfied visitors…”. Use complete sentences with consistent subject–verb agreement, and separate comparisons with full stops. Practising accurate simple sentences first will help you add complex structures more reliably.

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