Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The given tables compare the number of people who visited Ashdown Museum and their satisfaction level before and after its renovation.

Overall, after refurbishment ,the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum has been increased considerably and this survey showed a greater satisfaction level of visitors year after renovation as compared with the year before.

The result of the survey before the year of renewal of Ashdown Museum, illustrated that 15% visitors were very satisfied while 30% were satisfied among the 74,000 people. By contrast ,mostly visitors approximately 40% were dissatisfied and 10% were very dissatisfied and some about 5% people was irresponsive about Ashdown Museum.

On the other hand, the number of visitors and their satisfaction level on the year after renovation of Museum has increased from 74000 to 92,000. Among these 92,000 visitors ,35% visitors has become very satisfied and 40% were satisfied while dissatisfaction markedly decreased from 40% to 15%.Although 5% visitors were still very dissatisfied and 5% were remained not interested to give any response.The year after renovation illustrated that satisfaction level and as well as the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum has been increased to a greater extent.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You cover the main features of both the visitor total and the satisfaction surveys, and your overview correctly identifies that attendance rose after refurbishment while satisfaction improved. The figures you report are accurate: visitors increased from 74,000 to 92,000, and dissatisfaction fell from 40% to 15%. You also include the key satisfaction categories for both periods. This gives the response a clear, relevant account of the data. To make the reporting more precise, distinguish the survey percentages from the visitor totals: the percentages describe respondents’ satisfaction, not proportions of all 74,000 or 92,000 visitors. The claim that visitors were “not interested” in responding also goes beyond the chart, which only records “No response.” Avoid repeating the overview at the end and use that space to highlight the strongest contrasts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The response has a clear overall progression: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on the year before refurbishment, and a comparison with the year after. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “By contrast,” and “On the other hand” help signal the relationships between the figures. The main comparisons are easy to follow, and the two periods are presented in a sensible order. However, some transitions are not quite suited to the relationship being expressed, and the final sentence largely repeats the overview rather than adding a concluding comparison. Punctuation spacing also makes a few transitions less smooth. For stronger cohesion, group related figures more tightly and use concise comparisons, for example, pairing the rise in satisfied responses with the fall in dissatisfied responses.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for describing the charts, including “refurbishment,” “satisfaction level,” “markedly decreased,” and “illustrated.” These choices communicate the main trends, and the response attempts some less common language. However, several expressions are inaccurate or unnatural in this context, such as “irresponsive,” “not interested to give any response,” and “has been increased.” “Renewal” and “renovation” are also repeated alternatives for the same process, while “tables” does not accurately describe the mixed visuals. These choices do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and naturalness. Prefer standard chart-reporting collocations and use the category labels from the visual, especially “no response,” rather than interpreting respondents’ reasons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a contrast structure beginning “Although 5% visitors…” and clauses introduced by “while.” The overall meaning remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “has been increased” uses an unsuitable passive form for the visitor total, and “15% visitors” needs an article or a more appropriate percentage construction. There are also agreement and tense problems in “some about 5% people was” and “35% visitors has become.” Punctuation is inconsistent, with spaces before commas and no space after the full stop in “15%.Although.” Work on accurate subject–verb agreement, articles, and past-tense reporting; these corrections would make your varied sentence forms more controlled.

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