Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The table illustrate the proportion of individuals to ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was rufurbished , and the pie chart illustrate the final of surveys asking guests how liked they were with their visit , during the same two periods.

In an overview , in the table the highest number of visitors to ashdown museum during the year after refurbishment , and the lowest number of visitors to ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment , and in the pie chart the highest result of surveys of visitors satisfaction year before refubishment is dissatisfied and lowest is no response , and after refurbishment the highest result of surveys of visitor satisfaction is satisfied and lowest is no response and very dissatisfied is same .

First and foremost in the table the total number of visitors to ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment is 74000 , and during the year after refurbishment 92000 the number of visitors to ashdown museum .

As well as in the pie chart the results of surveys of visitor satifaction before refurbishment is very satisfied 15% , and satisfied 30% . However the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction before refurbishment dissatisfied is 40% , and very satisfied is is 10% . Furthermore the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction have no response is 5% . Additionally the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction after refurbishment very satisfied is 35% , and satisfied is 40% . Moreover the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction after refurbishment dissatisfied is 15% . At least but not last the result of very dissatisfied is 5% . At the end of the result of visitor after refurbishment no response is 5% .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover both the visitor totals and the satisfaction surveys, and most figures are reported accurately: visitors rose from 74,000 to 92,000, while satisfaction increased after refurbishment. Your overview identifies the main category shifts, including dissatisfaction being highest before and satisfaction highest afterwards. However, the overview is not fully clear, and the claim that “satisfied” was the highest category after refurbishment is inaccurate: 40% were dissatisfied and 40% satisfied, so they were joint highest. There is also a data error where you write “very satisfied” twice for the pre-refurbishment results; the 10% figure is “very dissatisfied.” The main features are relevant, but comparisons and the significance of the changes could be developed more clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the visitor total and survey results. This helps the reader locate the information. However, progression within the survey paragraph is weakened by a long sequence of similar statements beginning with “As well as,” “Furthermore,” “Additionally,” and “Moreover.” Some linking phrases are awkward or do not show a clear relationship, particularly “At least but not last” and “At the end of the result.” The overview also combines several comparisons in one sentence, making the main message difficult to follow. Grouping the survey results into before-and-after comparisons, and using fewer, more precise transitions, would make the organisation more coherent.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “refurbishment,” “visitors,” “satisfaction,” and “dissatisfied,” so the topic is generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “proportion of individuals” for visitor numbers and “how liked they were with their visit.” Repetition of “the result(s) of surveys of visitor satisfaction” also makes the report less natural. Spelling errors such as “rufurbished,” “refubishment,” and “satifaction” further reduce precision. Aim to use standard chart-reporting expressions consistently, such as “the percentage of respondents who were satisfied,” and check spelling carefully. More accurate and varied phrasing would make the information clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the reader can usually understand the figures you report. However, sentence structure and agreement are not consistently controlled. For example, “The table illustrate” needs subject–verb agreement, while “the highest number … during the year after refurbishment” is an incomplete sentence because it lacks a clear verb. The opening sentence also joins ideas without a well-formed structure, and “very satisfied is is 10%” contains an unnecessary repeated verb. Articles and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “in overview” and the spacing before commas. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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