Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrate the proportion of Total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before renovation 74,000 to after renovation 92,000.

The results of surveys of visitor satisfaction before renovation and after renovation.

So,Firstly we show the before refurbishment they mainly devided into 5 parts very satisfied,Satisfied,Dissatisfied,Very dissatisfied,No response.There are 15% of very satisfied and 30% of people are very dissatisfied after that 5% are no response and 10% are satisfied after the last one big supporting people dissatisfied 40%.

After refurbishment are totally change very satisfied 40% just because they like after the renewal process.They are change also big change in satisfied the number 35% or mainly people are come in this week for spend quality time with family.Then next one is dissatisfied in 15% they mainly come and not gone well maybe for an issue or something. THen the next one is no respone the number is only 5% they main,ly not justify anything.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the two visitor totals and discuss satisfaction in both periods, so the response includes relevant information from the task. However, several figures are misreported: before refurbishment, 10% were very dissatisfied and 30% were satisfied, not the reverse; afterwards, 35% were very satisfied and 40% satisfied, not 40% and 35%. The response also lacks a clear overview of the main changes, such as the rise in visitor numbers and the shift from mostly dissatisfied to mostly satisfied visitors. Some explanations about families and possible issues are speculative and are not shown by the charts. To strengthen the report, select the key trends, state them accurately, and avoid unsupported causes or opinions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response attempts to separate the two survey periods, which gives the reader a basic sense of how the information is organised. However, the opening is split into fragments, and the main discussion reads as a sequence of loosely connected observations rather than a clear report with an overview and supporting comparisons. Linking expressions such as “So, Firstly,” “after that,” and “Then the next one” are repetitive or awkward, and the order of categories is difficult to follow. Some references, including “the last one,” are unclear. Use distinct paragraphs for an overview and the detailed comparisons, and group related figures together with precise transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “visitor satisfaction,” “refurbishment,” and the satisfaction categories, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or informal for an academic chart report. “The pie chart” misidentifies the visual, while “big supporting people dissatisfied” and “come in this week” make parts of the account difficult to understand. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “devided,” “respone,” and “renewal process.” Aim for precise reporting language and accurate category labels; for example, describe percentages as rising or falling rather than adding unsupported explanations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences, but control is inconsistent and errors often make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “The pie chart illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, and “There are 15% of very satisfied” uses an unsuitable sentence pattern. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly the list beginning “There are 15%...” and the later sequence of category changes. Sentence structures are mostly simple or faulty attempts at combining clauses, with limited evidence of accurate complex forms. Practise clear patterns such as “The proportion of very satisfied visitors rose from 15% to 35%,” and check agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence boundaries.

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