Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table represents the number of visitors to ashdown muesum before and after its redevelopment, while pie charts compare the proportion of visitor's sastisfaction level during the two periods.

Overall, the number of visitors are increased after the refurbishment, satisfaction rate also increased. In constract thier is highest drop in dissatisfied people after the redevelopment. However, people with no respone remains same

fristly, 74,000 people are visted before refurbished, while after increased to 92,000 after development,very satisfied proportion is increased after the making changes,after that the rate of dissatisfied in decreased

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main overall directions: visitor numbers rose from 74,000 to 92,000, and dissatisfaction fell after refurbishment. However, the response reports only a small part of the survey data and does not give the key percentages for either period, such as the rise in satisfied visitors from 30% to 40% or the fall in dissatisfied visitors from 40% to 15%. The overview also says satisfaction increased without distinguishing the categories, and the final sentence is incomplete, leaving comparisons unclear. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, which limits how fully you can select and report the main features. Include a clear overview and compare the principal figures for both charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence introduces the visuals, an overview follows, and a final paragraph begins with “fristly” to present details. This gives the reader some sense of the intended structure. However, the progression is limited because the final paragraph stops before developing the comparisons, and several ideas are joined in a run-on sequence, particularly “after increased to 92,000 after development, very satisfied proportion is increased…”. Linking expressions such as “Overall” and “However” are present, but the contrast introduced by “However” is not clearly connected to the preceding point. Use separate, complete sentences and organise the details by comparing the before-and-after figures for visitor numbers and satisfaction.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “visitors,” “refurbishment,” “proportion,” and “dissatisfied,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make the report less clear, including “muesum,” “sastisfaction,” “constract,” and “respone.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “satisfaction rate also increased” and “after the making changes.” Aim for precise chart language and accurate spelling, and vary expressions for increases and decreases. For example, distinguish the share who were satisfied from the overall number of visitors, rather than using the broad phrase “satisfaction rate” without specifying the category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both a complex opening sentence with “while” and an overview using contrast, showing some effort to vary sentence forms. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “the number of visitors are increased” has incorrect agreement and verb form; “thier is highest drop” lacks a correct verb structure and article; and “74,000 people are visted” uses an incorrect passive construction. The final sentence also runs several clauses together without clear punctuation. Practise accurate past-tense reporting, subject–verb agreement, and complete sentence boundaries. A reliable pattern such as “Visitor numbers rose from X to Y, while the proportion who were dissatisfied fell” would help.

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