Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The table illustrates the numbers eof visitors to Ashodown Museum during the year before and year after it was refurbished, and the pie charts show the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction during the same two periods.

Overall, it is clear that number of visitors significnt increased during the year after refurbishment, while the result of surveys was largest persentge in dissatisfied the year before refurbishment and lowest porpotion was satisfied and no response the year after refurbishment.

Initially, it is clear, during the year before refurbishment was 74,000 visitor, and increased to 92,000 during the year after re

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the two visuals and report the visitor totals accurately: 74,000 before refurbishment and 92,000 after. You also attempt an overview, but it misstates the satisfaction pattern: before refurbishment, dissatisfaction was the largest category, while after refurbishment, satisfaction (40%) was largest; the lowest category after was “no response” at 5%, tied with very dissatisfied, not satisfied. Most survey figures are omitted, and the response ends before comparing the two sets of results. The answer is also substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task only partially addressed. To improve, give a clear overview of the main changes, then report the key percentages for both years and compare them directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic structure: an introduction, an overview beginning “Overall,” and a detail paragraph beginning “Initially.” This gives the reader some indication of how the response is organised. However, the progression is incomplete: the final paragraph stops mid-sentence at “during the year after re,” and there is no developed account of the survey results. The overview also combines several comparisons in a confusing way, making it difficult to follow which year each satisfaction category refers to. Use separate, complete paragraphs for the overview and supporting details, and organise the figures by before and after refurbishment. Clear links such as “By contrast” or “Meanwhile” can help show the changes without making the writing feel mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-relevant vocabulary, including “refurbished,” “visitor satisfaction,” “pie charts,” and “proportion,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, spelling and word-choice errors are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to interpret: “eof,” “Ashodown,” “significnt,” “persentge,” and “porpotion” appear in the text. Some phrasing is also unnatural, such as “the result of surveys was largest percentage in dissatisfied.” Aim for accurate, conventional expressions for describing charts, such as “the proportion of visitors who were dissatisfied was highest.” Proofread spelling carefully and use precise category labels, including “very satisfied” and “very dissatisfied,” rather than compressing them into unclear wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both a compound introduction and longer overview sentences, but control is inconsistent, and the response contains frequent grammatical errors. For example, “number of visitors significnt increased” lacks an article and uses an incorrect adverb form, while “during the year before refurbishment was 74,000 visitor” has an incomplete sentence structure and incorrect singular/plural agreement. The phrase “the year before and year after” also needs parallel article use. The final detail sentence is unfinished, so it cannot communicate a complete comparison. Practise building accurate simple sentences first—for example, “The museum received 74,000 visitors before refurbishment”—then add comparisons using controlled clauses such as “This figure rose to 92,000 afterwards.”

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