Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The table chart illustrates the proportion of travlers to ashdown museum since the year before and the year after it was refurbished therefore the pie charts demostrate the number of visitors outcome of serveys asking how satisfied they were whit their explore, duiring the two diffrent periods.

Overall, it is clear that the number of visitors ashdown museum

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5

The response makes a relevant attempt to introduce the table and charts, and begins an overview with “Overall,” but it does not complete that overview or report any usable figures or comparisons. The key features—visitor numbers rising from 74,000 to 92,000 and satisfaction improving overall—are therefore missing, as are the survey percentages. The phrase “proportion of travellers” also misidentifies what the table measures: it gives visitor totals. The response is only 48 words, below the required 150, so the task is substantially incomplete. To improve, complete the overview and select the main changes, supporting them with accurate figures from both periods.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by a separate paragraph beginning “Overall,” which signals a summary. However, the second paragraph stops mid-idea (“the number of visitors ashdown museum”), so there is no logical progression to comparisons or supporting details. The opening sentence also combines several points in a long, difficult-to-follow sequence, and “therefore” does not clearly connect the table and charts. Use a clear introduction, a complete overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the figures. Simple links such as “while” and “by contrast” would help show relationships without making the sentences cumbersome.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts task-related vocabulary, including “refurbished,” “proportion,” “visitors,” and “satisfied,” so the topic is recognisable. However, several spelling errors—“travlers,” “demostrate,” “serveys,” “whit,” “duiring,” and “diffrent”—make the writing look uncontrolled. Some word choices are also inaccurate: “proportion of travellers” does not describe the visitor totals, and “visitors outcome of surveys” is an unclear phrase for survey results. Build accuracy with standard chart language such as “number of visitors,” “survey results,” and “levels of satisfaction,” and check spelling carefully. The limited amount of writing also prevents the vocabulary range from being demonstrated more fully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There is an attempt at a complex sentence in the opening, using “therefore” to connect ideas, and the start of the overview shows awareness of a separate sentence structure. However, the opening is difficult to parse because several clauses and ideas are crowded together without clear grammatical relationships. The overview is incomplete, so it cannot demonstrate control of a full sentence. The response also offers too little evidence of varied structures or consistently accurate sentence formation. Aim for shorter, complete sentences first—for example, state what the table shows, then describe what the charts compare—and use a clear subject and verb in each sentence. This will make the information easier to understand.

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