Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrates the resultes of surveys of visitor satisfaction year before and after refubishment while, a table shows the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum.

Overall, during the year of before refubishment 74,000 visitors to Ashdown Museum. After refubishment a number of visitors increased and reached to 92,0000. Before refurbishment, Dissatisfied visitors ratio was largest among all while, no response ratio was smallest. After refurbishment, a ratio of satisfied people increased and no response ratio remain same.

Looking at pie charts, 40% visitors dissatisfied before refurbishment compare to 15% after refurbishment while, a ratio of satisfied and very satisfied vistors before refurbishment followed by 30% and 15% compare with 40% and 35% after refurbishment. 10% of visitors very dissatisfied before refurbishment and after that a ratio discreased and reached to 5%. No response ration same in both years of refurbishment followed by 5%. Visitor satisfaction increased after refurbishment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover both the visitor totals and the satisfaction surveys, and your overview identifies the main shifts: attendance rose from 74,000 to 92,000, dissatisfaction fell, and satisfaction increased. The figures you give for the survey categories are accurate, including the unchanged 5% with no response. This gives the report a clear, relevant foundation. Some features are less fully developed, however: the overview says satisfaction increased without explicitly noting that the largest category changed from dissatisfied to satisfied, and the visitor-total comparison is not explored beyond stating the rise. A more precise overview and a clearer comparison of the overall positive and negative responses would make the key trends more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph reporting the survey figures. The information generally moves from the overall picture to specific categories, so the reader can follow the comparison. However, progression is sometimes weakened by repeated or awkward linking, especially the repeated use of “while” and “after refurbishment.” The final sentence, “Visitor satisfaction increased after refurbishment,” repeats a point already made rather than adding a new comparison. Some clauses are also joined in ways that make relationships unclear. Grouping the positive categories together and then the negative categories, with fewer repeated connectors, would make the organisation more fluent and cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary such as “visitor satisfaction,” “dissatisfied,” “very dissatisfied,” and “increased,” which allows you to report the main data. However, the range and control are limited by repeated wording and several inaccurate forms or collocations. Examples include “a ratio of satisfied people,” “no response ration,” and “reached to 92,0000”; these make the description less natural and, in the last case, obscure the figure. There are also spelling errors such as “resultes,” “refubishment,” and “vistors.” Use standard chart language such as “the proportion of visitors” or “accounted for,” and check spelling and numerical presentation carefully to improve precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, including a sentence contrasting dissatisfaction before and after refurbishment. However, grammatical control is uneven, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms sometimes make the meaning less clear. For example, “The pie charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “during the year of before refurbishment 74,000 visitors” is not a complete grammatical sentence. “No response ratio remain same” also needs a correctly formed verb and article. Build a reliable base with complete sentences, then use controlled comparative clauses. Proofreading for agreement and sentence completeness would help your range of structures communicate the data more accurately.

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