Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Writing Test

(Task 1)

Today we write about the differences that appear at ashdown museum. before and after refurbishment. We also discuss the visitor reviews in this.

The very first change that appear before an after refurbishment is total number of visitors. As the given graph we see that there is huge gap of peoples before and after refurbishment. Before refurbishment there was approximately 74,000 visitors that gradually increased after the refurbishment to 92,000.

Now, lets talk about the visitors surveys after the before and after refurbishment acco on the basis of given data.

The percentage of very satisfied visitors was 15%. that gradually increased to 35% after the refurbishment. Same like that the number of satisfied visitors was 30% that is now increased 10% and now became 40%.

There is also a rapid decrease in be dissatisfied vistors as that was before 40% and now rapidly decreased to 15%. The percentage of very dissatisfied visitors was 10%. which now became 5% that is very good for the ASHDOWN MUSEUM.

There is also visitors that don't gave any response have same percentage before and after refurbishment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You report the main visitor total accurately, rising from 74,000 to 92,000, and cover all five satisfaction categories. The key shifts are also correctly identified: satisfaction increased (15% to 35% very satisfied; 30% to 40% satisfied), while dissatisfaction fell (40% to 15%; 10% to 5% very dissatisfied), and no response stayed at 5%. This gives the response relevant coverage of the task. However, there is no clear overview that brings these patterns together; the opening mainly announces what the response will discuss. Some comparisons are also less fully developed, and phrases such as “huge gap” do not clearly explain the overall significance of the changes. Add a concise overview highlighting the rise in visitors and the marked improvement in satisfaction, then support it with selected figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response follows a generally understandable order: it introduces the topic, reports visitor numbers, and then discusses survey results. Paragraph breaks help separate these points, and expressions such as “There is also” signal additional information. However, progression is weakened by a conversational opening (“Today we write about”) and by transitions that feel mechanical, including “Now, lets talk about.” The sentence beginning “Now, lets talk about the visitors surveys after the before and after refurbishment” is difficult to follow and does not clearly introduce the comparison. Group the satisfaction results more deliberately—for example, positive responses together and negative responses together—and use clear references such as “before refurbishment” and “after refurbishment” rather than repeating awkward transition phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “percentage,” “visitors,” and “dissatisfied,” so the reader can understand the main subject and comparisons. There is some variation in describing change, such as “increased” and “decreased.” However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for a formal data summary: “huge gap of peoples,” “Same like that,” and “very good for the ASHDOWN MUSEUM.” “Rapid” is also not well supported by a chart showing two survey periods, and “reviews” is less accurate than “survey responses.” Spelling and word-form slips such as “vistors” and “don't gave” further reduce control. Prefer neutral, precise reporting language and avoid evaluative comments about whether a result is good.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, and the main figures are usually expressed in sentences that remain understandable. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, particularly in sentence boundaries, verb forms, and agreement. For example, “The very first change that appear” should use a verb agreeing with “change,” while “visitors that don't gave any response have same percentage” contains an incorrect verb form and missing article. Several sentences begin with lowercase letters after full stops, and punctuation is often misplaced, as in “15%. that gradually increased.” The range is also limited, with repeated basic sentence patterns and some faulty attempts at more complex structures. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and combine related comparisons into well-controlled sentences.

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