Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table illustrates the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before it was refurbished, while the chart compares the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction during the same two periods.

Overall, the number of visitors increased considerably after the refurbishment. Furthermore, vistors satisfaction improved significantly, as the proportions of satisfied and very satisfied visitors rose, whereas dissatisfaction declined.

Before the year, the Museum recieved 74,000 visitors, compared with 92,000 visitors in the following year. However, the survey of dissatisfied contain 40% in before the year and dropped to 15% in after the year refurbishment. Regarding the first year, satisfied visitors marked 30% and rise steadily to 40% after the year. Similarly, the proportion of very satisfied increase significantly from 15% to 35%, whereas very dissatisfied drop from 10% to 5% in after the year.

In contrast, the proportion of people who gave no response still same around 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main trends accurately: attendance rose from 74,000 to 92,000, satisfaction increased, and dissatisfaction fell. The key survey figures are also reported correctly, including the unchanged 5% giving no response. However, the response is below the required 150 words, with 140 words counted (11 words copied from the prompt are excluded), so the summary is not sufficiently developed. Some comparisons are compressed or unclear, particularly “the survey of dissatisfied contain 40% in before the year,” and the overview could more clearly distinguish the overall satisfaction categories from dissatisfaction. Add a little explanation of the combined shift toward positive responses and use the extra space to present comparisons precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph with the visitor total and survey comparisons, and a final sentence about non-responses. This makes the main progression easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Similarly,” and “In contrast” help connect points, although some are mechanical or do not express the relationship precisely; for example, “In contrast” introduces a category that simply remained unchanged. The sentence beginning “However” also makes the transition from visitor totals to survey results feel abrupt. Improve cohesion by grouping positive responses together and negative responses together, and use clearer references such as “before refurbishment” and “after refurbishment” consistently.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “proportions,” “dissatisfied,” “rose,” and “declined,” and the meaning is generally clear. However, several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “vistors” and “recieved” are misspelled, while “the survey of dissatisfied” is an awkward way to refer to the share of dissatisfied visitors. Phrases such as “in before the year” and “still same” are also unnatural. Use accurate collocations such as “the proportion of dissatisfied visitors” and “remained unchanged.” The vocabulary is adequate for describing the data, but more consistent control of these common expressions and careful proofreading would make the report more fluent and precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including a contrast structure with “whereas” and a subordinate clause in the overview. The main comparisons remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “satisfied visitors … rise steadily” and “very satisfied increase” need past-tense verbs (“rose” and “increased”); “the survey … contain” also has incorrect agreement and tense. In “the proportion … still same,” the sentence is missing a verb, and “in before the year” shows an inaccurate prepositional pattern. Keep the reporting consistently in the past tense and check that each clause has a correctly formed verb. These corrections would improve accuracy while preserving your range of sentence forms.

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