Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The both pie charts illustrates the numbers of tourists visting to the Ashdown museum in the year before and the year after it was renewed. The chart shows the response of people during their vist of both time period.

Overall,the chart demostrate the number of vistor visting the year before refurbishment and after the year of refurbishment.At that time a survey was conducted from the vistors.

Survey's result involve vistors satisfaction level(very satisfied,satisfied,dissatisfied,very dissatified,no response)Levels of both years,separately,theYear before refurbishment vistors mostly showed high ratio of satisfied,in contrast to, the year after refurbishment showed high ratio of very satisfied.

Year before refurbishment 15 vistor was very satisfied people, 30 was satisfied,40 was dissatisfied,10 was very dissatisfied,5 gave no response.Total no of vistor during year before refurbishment.

In contrast, year after refurbishment doubled about 35 visitors very satisfied,40 visitors satisfied,15 dissatisfied visible decrease in ratio,5 very dissatisfied,5 remain stable with no response

It show how vistors are more satisfied with museum after refurbishment.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You include the main categories of satisfaction and report most of their percentages accurately: for example, before refurbishment, 15% were very satisfied and 40% dissatisfied, while afterwards these figures were 35% and 15%. You also identify the broad improvement in satisfaction. However, the overview is unclear and does not report the table’s key visitor totals of 74,000 and 92,000. The claim that the number of visitors “doubled” is inaccurate; the total rose, but not by that amount. Some details are also expressed as numbers of visitors rather than percentages, which misrepresents the chart. To develop the response more fully, clearly summarise both the increase in attendance and the shift towards satisfaction, then compare the survey figures accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is an attempt to organise the response into an introduction, an overview and a comparison, and phrases such as “Overall” and “In contrast” help signal relationships. However, progression is not consistently clear: the overview repeats the task description, and the sentence beginning “Survey’s result involve…” is difficult to follow. The paragraph about the first year ends with an incomplete statement, “Total no of vistor during year before refurbishment,” leaving the visitor total unreported. Some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly “in contrast to, the year after…”. Use distinct paragraphs for the overview and the detailed comparisons, and connect each comparison directly to its relevant figures.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some relevant task vocabulary, including “refurbishment,” “satisfaction level,” and “decrease,” and the reader can generally identify the categories being discussed. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the report less clear, such as “visting,” “vistors,” “demostrate,” and “dissatified.” Phrases such as “numbers of tourists visting to the Ashdown museum” and “doubled about 35 visitors” are not natural or precise for describing survey percentages. Use standard chart-reporting language and distinguish percentages from visitor totals. Accurate terms such as “accounted for,” “rose to,” and “the proportion of respondents” would make comparisons clearer and more appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparisons, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships difficult to understand. For example, “The both pie charts illustrates” has problems with the article, word order and subject–verb agreement, while “15 vistor was very satisfied people” does not form a clear grammatical sentence. The sentence beginning “Overall,the chart demostrate…” also lacks clear structure and punctuation. Many statements are fragments, including “Total no of vistor during year before refurbishment.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, plurals and punctuation. A reliable pattern such as “The proportion of visitors who were satisfied rose from 30% to 40%” would help you express comparisons accurately.

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