Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the modern era, a large number of private departments are funding medical research projects. I think, it should be the responsibility of the government as well as of private companies to facilitate research and provide all basic equipment and machines for this purpose.

To commence with the idea, that the government has a lot of responsibilities and projects and it will be a major responsibility to provide basic needs and equipment to research associates. There are vast fields of research such as biotechnology and molecular biology and more. For their advanced knowledge and understanding, the State should import machines such as PCR and DNA analysis sequencer, but unfortunately, its quantity is very minute in Pakistan. Furthermore, due to the lack of these instruments our research work will not be done on a vast scale and samples are destroyed or sometimes, sent for analysis to the foreign countries.

On the other hand, some private departments provide some donations to laboratories and they purchase equipment but they provide minimal budgets and according to that only few basic need they can fulfill. In addition, although they are also responsible for this advanced study, it cannot beat the demand because on a large scale it would be needed. And these are limited resources.

To conclude, if we want to improve our medical science, we should provide them all basic labs and related machines and it would be better for the government and private departments to provide all facilities to students so that they can research and learn bio- technology more than the foreign students.

6.5

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you argue that both government and private companies should support medical research, and you give relevant reasons for each. The examples of limited PCR and DNA-sequencing equipment in Pakistan, and of private donations funding only basic needs, help connect the argument to a real context. However, the government’s role is explained more fully than the private sector’s, whose contribution is described mainly as insufficient. The conclusion also introduces the aim of helping students learn “more than the foreign students,” which is not clearly linked to the funding argument. Develop the private-sector case with a specific benefit or example, and make the conclusion restate the central position more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, separate paragraphs for government and private support, and a conclusion. The contrastive opening “On the other hand” helps signal the shift between the two sources of funding, while “Furthermore” and “To conclude” guide the reader through the discussion. Some connections are less clear or feel mechanical, however. For example, “To commence with the idea, that…” does not form a smooth transition into the first argument, and “And these are limited resources” is detached from the preceding sentence. Improve progression by linking each supporting point explicitly to the paragraph’s main claim and by avoiding sentence fragments or isolated follow-up statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant subject vocabulary, including “biotechnology,” “molecular biology,” “PCR,” and “DNA analysis sequencer,” which makes the discussion specific to medical research. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “advanced knowledge and understanding” and “on a large scale.” However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, including “private departments,” “research associates,” “basic needs,” and “its quantity is very minute.” “Bio- technology” is also inconsistently written. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding your main points, but they reduce precision. Aim for standard academic collocations and check whether each noun accurately describes the organisation, equipment, or funding you mean.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “although” and “because,” and most of the argument remains understandable. Some grammatical errors occur in sentence construction and agreement. For example, “To commence with the idea, that…” incorrectly separates the introductory phrase from its clause, while “only few basic need they can fulfill” has problems with word order and singular/plural agreement. In “its quantity is very minute,” the reference to equipment is also grammatically unclear. Review article use, countable and uncountable nouns, and clause structure, then proofread longer sentences for punctuation. More consistently controlled complex sentences would make your reasoning easier to follow.

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