Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In this 21st centuary medical research is the important factor it plays important role which can make imposible things into possible so it is very important .

In my belive medical research should be funded by government so that it become more convenient to public . if its over take by privite or industrial companies its become more expensive to the general public to use its result medicine . which cost cannot be fulfilled by general public .

Research is the search of new things which science can make posible

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You state a clear preference for government funding: “medical research should be funded by government.” You also give a relevant reason, suggesting that private or industrial funding could make medicines more expensive for the public. However, the response addresses the question only minimally: it does not explain the role of individuals, compare the three possible sources of funding, or develop its main reason with a specific example. The final sentence, “Research is the search of new things,” does not add support to your position. The response is also substantially below the required 250 words, leaving too little space to explain and support your ideas. Develop each point with a clear explanation and a relevant example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence: you introduce medical research, state your preference for government funding, give a reason, and add a concluding-sounding definition. The phrase “so that” connects your position to its intended benefit, while “if” introduces a contrast with private funding. However, the ideas are not arranged into a developed argument, and the final sentence does not clearly connect to the preceding point. The response would be easier to follow if it used separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons and comparison with other funders. Use clear links to show how each example supports your argument, rather than leaving the reader to infer the connection.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “medical research,” “government,” “private,” “industrial companies,” and “general public,” so the central subject is understandable. However, the range is narrow, and several spelling and word-choice errors reduce precision: “centuary,” “imposible,” “belive,” “privite,” and “posible.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “over take by” and “use its result medicine.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations such as “fund research,” “make medicines affordable,” and “the results of research.” Expanding your vocabulary to discuss public funding, commercial interests and access to treatment would help you explain the topic more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and a conditional structure, as in “if its over take by privite or industrial companies its become more expensive.” This shows an effort to connect ideas, but sentence control is inconsistent. For example, “it plays important role” is missing an article, and “so that it become more convenient” has an incorrect verb form. The conditional sentence also has unclear structure and agreement, making the relationship between private funding and medicine costs difficult to follow. Most sentences are short or incomplete, so there is little evidence of a wider range of structures. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, articles and complete sentences before adding more complex clauses.

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