Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays many medical projects are carried out by Private compnies. In my preceptions medical researches should be done by government because Private companies pay attention only on profit.

First hand Private companies work only for thier profit.So they will do research only those diseases which make them more profit.For instance they mainly reasearch on buty cares and less do research on diseases like TB, Maleria because these kinds of diseases affect only poor people.

Second hand Private companies can be dishonest.If the result of medicine is bad they might hide to save its buisuness and its reputation.This impact leave very bad effect on humman health. Therefore Government compnies only for the wealthfare of public they not focus on proit.

On the other hand the uiniversities and famous hospitals they should work for the goverment. They have expert Docters, students, they can do good research on local diseases.If the government give them money.Furthermore through this students and docter get knowledge about new medicines and treatments.

In addition some individulas arguement that Government have less money and team.But government can slove this problems by get money from privates compnies and use it under their own rules.Through this process poor peoples also get better medicines and improve thier health.

In my oppinion goverment should carried all medical projects because purpose of private organisation is money they dont pay head on the quality of medicines.Thats why we faced many health issues in their daily lifes

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear preference for government-funded research, and your reasons—profit-driven priorities, possible concealment of harmful results, and public benefit—are relevant to the question. However, the response only partly develops the task: the prompt asks whether research should be carried out by private companies, individuals, or government, but the role of individuals is barely considered, and the suggestion that government can obtain private funding is not explained in detail. Examples such as research into tuberculosis and malaria help illustrate your point, but the claims remain broad and would benefit from specific support. The conclusion repeats your position rather than drawing the argument together. Also, the response is 9 words below the required minimum, so it does not meet the task’s length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate supporting paragraphs, a counterpoint, and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First hand,” “Second hand,” “On the other hand,” and “In addition” show an effort to guide the reader. However, progression is not always clear: the paragraph beginning “On the other hand” shifts to universities and hospitals without clearly explaining how this contrasts with the previous point. Some links are mechanical or inaccurate, and “Furthermore through this” does not clearly identify what “this” refers to. Improve cohesion by making each paragraph’s main point explicit and using pronouns and transitions only when their references are clear. This would make the overall argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “diseases,” “medicine,” “treatments,” “profit,” and “public,” so the reader can understand the main argument. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make the writing less clear or natural. For example, “medical researches” is not the usual form, “buty cares” appears to mean beauty care, and “pay head on the quality” does not express the intended meaning clearly. Repeated use of “profit,” “government,” and “research” also limits variety. Build a more accurate set of topic phrases, such as “medical research,” “commercial incentives,” and “public health priorities,” and check spelling carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you express distinctions between funding, conducting research, and benefiting from it.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including conditional and cause-and-effect structures, as in “If the result of medicine is bad, they might hide…” and “But government can solve this problems…”. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to process. Examples include “Government companies only for the wealthfare of public they not focus on proit,” which lacks a clear verb structure, and “government should carried all medical projects,” where the verb form is incorrect. There are also recurring problems with articles, plurals, agreement, and sentence boundaries. Practise building accurate subject–verb–object sentences first, then add subordinate clauses, checking that each clause has a complete verb and that singular and plural forms agree.

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