Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In present era, private companies are giving money for health related research projects. In my opinion, this research should conduect through goverment because monoply of products and earning from it

Firstly, when private sector conduect research thruough own finance they can create monoply on new invinted produect in a market. However they can demand of high charge of medicines and other medical products.For instance, a company introduce vaccine for epidimic disease through their researcj they will charge high charges from patients. So, government should invest own money on research because everyone get treatment without spending to much on treatment. Furthermore, new researcher also get free knowledge from seniors researchers without paying high fees to private sector.

Secondly, the other benefit goverment gain revenue from solution to specific problem

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear preference for government funding: “this research should [be] conducted through government.” The points about private companies creating monopolies and charging high prices are relevant, and the vaccine example begins to support your view. However, the response addresses the question only partially: it does not meaningfully compare funding by individuals with funding by companies or government, and the second reason, “government gain revenue,” is not explained. The conclusion and fuller development of your position are also missing. The response is below the required 250 words, which limits how fully you can explain and support your ideas. Develop each reason with a clear explanation and a specific example, and address all the funding options in the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you give your opinion, introduce a first reason with “Firstly,” and begin a second point with “Secondly.” This helps the reader recognise the intended structure. However, the response does not progress to a complete argument: the second point stops after “government gain revenue,” and there is no concluding paragraph. Connections between ideas are sometimes unclear, particularly the move from affordable treatment to researchers gaining knowledge. The repeated use of “because” and “So” also makes the linking somewhat mechanical. Use separate paragraphs for your position, each developed reason, and conclusion; then connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “medical research projects,” “monopoly,” “vaccine,” and “patients,” so the main subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors make the writing harder to read, such as “conduect,” “goverment,” “monoply,” and “epidimic.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, including “high charges” and “free knowledge from seniors researchers.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, such as “charge high prices for medicines” and “experienced researchers.” A wider range of precise terms for funding, access, and research outcomes would help you explain the argument more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional clause beginning “when private sector…” and a reason introduced by “because.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. For example, “they can demand of high charge” has an incomplete grammatical pattern, while “a company introduce vaccine” has problems with verb form and articles. The opening sentence also lacks a complete, clearly punctuated structure, and “everyone get treatment” has subject–verb agreement trouble. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, checking articles and agreement, and using punctuation to separate clauses.

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