Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These days, numerious medical research projects are funded by private companies. Some people think that research should be carried by them, others believe goverment or individuals should do that. Although all the views have merit. I believe that the government is responsible of funding it, rather than companies or individuals.

Private companies main purpose is gaining money, So from their perspective, funding research could be a waste of money. In addition, if they spend money on research, there is high probability they will not spend it on rare cases, or for special case individuals, to illustrate, companies that invent medical equipment, does not invest on the equipment that is made for individuals with rare special conditions, and america is suffering from this obstacle. Furthermore, individuals are already spending a lot of money paying taxes, if the government rise the tax price, this will be a major problem for them.

Neverthless, Government is already collecting taxes from individuals and the private sector, and it is capable to fund the medical research without facing difficulties. Furthermore, the government own the universities, so it can aid the Phd research directly rather than starting it's own research from scratch. For instanse, Germany funded the medical research by itself, without relying on private corporates, Unlike in america, companies fund the medical research, but Hospitals are unaffordable for the locals. Therefore, Government must carry the investment.

In conclusion, health must come first, and this should be the responsibilty of everyone, yet relying only on private companies and individuals will not lead to greater results.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address the question by taking a clear position in favour of government funding and giving reasons, including the need to support research into rare conditions and the use of universities and PhD research. The examples comparing Germany and America also attempt to support your argument. However, the discussion of individuals is less fully developed: you mention taxes and the effect of raising them, but do not clearly explain whether individuals should fund research directly or why this is less effective. Some claims, such as the link between private funding and unaffordable hospitals, need clearer explanation or evidence. Develop each funding option more evenly and make the examples directly demonstrate your reasons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction states your view, the body paragraphs present concerns about private and individual funding before arguing for government support, and the conclusion restates the position. Linking expressions such as “In addition,” “Furthermore,” and “Therefore” help show relationships between ideas. At times, however, the connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, the point about individuals paying taxes is placed within the paragraph on private companies, and the transition from government funding to hospital affordability in America is not fully explained. The opening fragment, “Although all the views have merit,” also interrupts the flow. Group related arguments more clearly and use explicit links to show how each example supports your position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “medical equipment,” “rare cases,” “private sector,” and “medical research,” so the main ideas are generally understandable. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors reduce precision, such as “numerious,” “goverment,” “responsibilty,” and “rise the tax price.” Some expressions are also vague or unnatural, including “special case individuals” and “carry the investment.” These issues fit a performance where vocabulary is adequate for communicating the basic argument but control is inconsistent. Build a more accurate set of phrases for funding and research, and check spelling and collocations carefully so your meaning sounds precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast clause beginning “Although” and a sentence with “rather than.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some sentence structures and grammatical patterns are inaccurate. “Although all the views have merit” is a dependent clause used as a sentence, while “companies that invent medical equipment, does not invest” has a subject–verb agreement error. Other examples include “the government rise the tax price” and “the government own the universities,” where verb forms do not match the subject or intended meaning. Punctuation and capitalisation are also inconsistent. Practise complete sentence construction, agreement, and verb forms, then proofread each sentence while retaining your attempts at complex structures.

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