Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In recent days we have seen the medical researches are conducted by private companies but in my opinion it is a good initiative if private companies also research in medical projects as government.

Now a days, The private companies are not like before the companiese are working as other field companiese like Technological or Petrochemical which are well organized organizations working hard to get the end product to the consumers as soon as possible, Without any time taking on tenders and funds to be allocated or a huge amount of government approvals and also the timeframe is not well organized as the private companiese have.

Multinational companiese like Marton Dow are plying huge roles in the field. If we look at the 2019 Covid-19 we have seen that the research came first from a private company called scynopharm, this shows that we have companiese that can controll a global pandamic if the world is in need. People in the private companiese are paid well to do a research that is why huge number of researchers that are very intelligent in their field try to join the private firms. One other reason why the private companiese do good researchs are because they have compitation in the market with other firms. So, every company is in race to get the solution to the problem as fast as possible and as relaible as possible.

The concultion at the end is that private companiese have a huge compitation and they do the research as fast as psobbile. Whereas, government researches are time consuming, have to take approvals from different officers and do not have sufficent funds as private companiese.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is identifiable: you support private companies conducting medical research, and you give relevant reasons, including faster decision-making, competition, and the ability to attract researchers through good pay. The example of a company’s role during the Covid-19 pandemic also attempts to support your view. However, the task asks whether research should be carried out by private companies, individuals, or government, and your response mainly compares private firms with government; the role of individual researchers or a balanced approach is not addressed. Several claims, such as government research having insufficient funds, are asserted rather than explained or supported. Develop the example accurately and explain how private research can serve public needs, not only company competition.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an opening opinion, reasons in the body, and a concluding comparison. Ideas such as speed, funding, and competition are generally relevant to the central argument, and linking phrases including “One other reason” and “Whereas” help signal relationships. However, progression is not always clear: the second paragraph combines several points in a long sentence, while the Covid-19 example and researcher motivation are introduced without clear transitions or sufficient explanation. Repeated references to “private companies” make the writing feel repetitive, and the conclusion largely repeats earlier claims rather than drawing them together. Use one main point per paragraph, connect each example explicitly to that point, and vary referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “medical projects,” “researchers,” “approvals,” “funds,” and “competition,” so the reader can follow the general subject. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate or misspelled choices make the argument less clear or less natural. Examples include “medical researches,” “huge roles,” “controll a global pandamic,” and “as relaible as possible.” Some expressions are also imprecise, such as “the end product” when discussing medical research outcomes. Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully; terms such as “clinical research,” “develop treatments,” and “public funding” would express your ideas more precisely. Avoid repeating “private companies” by using clear alternatives such as “these firms” where the reference is unambiguous.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “If we look at the 2019 Covid-19…” and a contrast introduced by “Whereas.” However, complex sentences are often difficult to control, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “we have seen the medical researches are conducted” needs a clearer tense and clause structure, while “the companies are not like before the companiese are working” joins clauses without appropriate punctuation. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, as in “a research” and the long sentence beginning “Now a days.” Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses carefully. Review verb forms, articles, plurals, and punctuation when editing.

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