Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In the recent years, there is a great developments in a healthcare department with the help of different private organaizations. In my opinion although the private companies play a key role while governement should carried out the medical research because it is basic need of person life.

On the one hand, the governement work for the people benefit because they prefer the public health. In contrast, private companies want to earn more money, therefore companies prefer the treatment which economically beneficial for companies. In contrast, some researches are funded by a governments which is mainly for the people, for instance during the outbreak of COVID-19 the vaccines are prepare by corporation of governement and private. These vaccines are free for every poor and rich people.

On the other, the private companies always prefer those treatment which will beneficial for people. some private companies are hide the side effects of medicines, while governments take a deep look on the every experiments. In addition, government during experiments do not ignore the minor details because they follow the world health organization. As a private companies they have fully equipped laboratries and machines which use during the medicine experiment. Therefore, they should be allowed to help the government under the strict regulations. Individuals cannot carry the modern research alone because it is expensiveand need a large teams and advanced equipments.

In conclusion, medical research should be mainly done by the governement to ensure fairness, honesty and affordable treatment for all. Private companies shou;d support not control, this important work.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

Your position is clear: you believe government should lead medical research, with private companies supporting it under regulation. You address the roles of government, companies and individuals, and the COVID-19 vaccine example helps make the discussion relevant. This meets the task well, although the comparison is not equally developed: the point that individuals cannot conduct modern research alone is brief, and the benefits of government oversight could be explained with a specific example. Some claims also need clearer qualification, such as saying private companies “always prefer” treatments that benefit people, which conflicts with your earlier point about profit. Develop and support each main reason more consistently to make the argument fuller and more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the main position can be followed. However, progression within the body paragraphs is uneven, and some linking phrases are inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “In contrast” is used twice in the first body paragraph, although the second use introduces an example rather than a contrast. “On the other” is also an incomplete transition, and the relationship between the claims about companies hiding side effects and having advanced laboratories could be made clearer. Use topic sentences to establish each paragraph’s focus, then connect each example directly to the reason it supports. Clearer referencing would also help readers follow who “they” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “medical research,” “side effects,” “vaccines,” “strict regulations” and “advanced equipment,” so the subject is generally clear. There are also attempts at more formal phrasing, such as “ensure fairness” and “affordable treatment.” However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive: “a healthcare department,” “people benefit” and “economically beneficial for companies” do not sound natural in context. Spelling errors such as “organaizations,” “governement” and “laboratries” also reduce accuracy. Build a bank of common academic collocations and check spelling carefully; more precise wording will help express your ideas without relying repeatedly on “companies,” “people” and “treatment.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a concession in “although the private companies play a key role” and a reason clause with “because.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors in sentence construction and grammatical forms occur across the response. For example, “there is a great developments” has a mismatch between the verb and plural noun, while “research should carried out” is missing the passive auxiliary. Other examples include “vaccines are prepare” and “a large teams,” which show problems with verb forms and agreement. Practise accurate passive constructions, articles and singular/plural agreement, then proofread each sentence for a complete verb phrase. This will make your varied sentence attempts more reliable.

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