Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Yes it is visible that nowadays medical research projects are funded by private companies which is little bit dissapointing that government is not much interested as private companies are. I would love if our government take initiative and start funding to research projects so we can get more good doctors and medical staff and people will also over the moon after getting treatment this kind of doctors and staff. if doctors and medical staff start getting research project funding by governmet they will prefer doing jobs in government hospital over the private ones because somewhere in their heart they will attach to government help and people of our country will get one of the best treatment what they deserve. But i won't say that i'm totally against the private companies funding, they should also funds as much as they can but under the government team or cabinet team so it will empowerment the government and their team. And also if someone willing to start funding on its individual so it should be allowed by the government also their should be a appreciation for that individual from the giovernment in the form of medal or certificate so the more people attracts to this and start funding because in the it is beneficial for the students and medical staff to grow more in their respective industries and provide their outcome in their jobs. So in the end i support all the fundings towards the medical research projects by government, individuals and private companies but it should be under the government initiative or plan.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall preference: government should lead, while private companies and individuals may also contribute under government oversight. This addresses the question’s options, and you offer relevant reasons, such as supporting medical staff and improving treatment. However, the response only partly develops these ideas. For example, the claim that government funding would make doctors prefer public hospitals is asserted without explaining how funding would affect their employment choices. The proposed medals or certificates for individual donors is also mentioned briefly rather than supported with an example or explanation. Develop one or two reasons in more depth and show more directly how your preferred funding arrangement would benefit medical research. The response meets the stated length requirement; eight words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: you begin with the issue, discuss government funding, then consider private and individual contributions, and finish by restating your position. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the stages of the argument are difficult to distinguish. Progression is also limited by repeated linking phrases such as “and also” and “so,” while several ideas are joined into very long sentences. For instance, the sentence beginning “if doctors and medical staff start getting research project funding” moves from funding to job preferences and then to treatment quality without clear steps. Use separate paragraphs for your main position, supporting reasons, and conclusion, and make each sentence develop one connected point. This would make the argument easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the general subject, including “medical research projects,” “funding,” “government hospital,” and “medical staff.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or informal, which sometimes makes the meaning less clear. For example, “people will also over the moon” does not fit the intended meaning, and “it will empowerment the government” uses the wrong form and an unclear expression. There are also spelling errors such as “dissapointing,” “governmet,” and “giovernment.” Aim for precise phrases such as “improve access to treatment” and “strengthen public research capacity,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use clauses with “if” and “because,” but the range is limited and these complex structures are often faulty. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. For example, “I would love if our government take initiative” needs a correctly formed verb and article, while “private companies … they should also funds” has an incorrect verb form. The opening sentence also joins several ideas without clear punctuation, and the final sentence beginning “So in the end” is attached to the preceding argument rather than clearly separated. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine related ideas using controlled subordinate clauses. Review subject–verb agreement, verb forms after modal verbs, and punctuation.

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