Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Curently, saveral madical founderd projects are funded by private companies.I think that research should be carried by private companies individuals .In my opinion, this is a good statement government should be opens reserch labs and new institutes.

Firstly, Nowadays,government take not intrest in their works ,while, private compnys intrested in their institue .Because government does not understood their work which cause big problem like poverty.In addition,if government sould open the new companies,finsh the unemplymenty in their world this is a big lead to in poverty .But curently, lot of companies in whole over the world ,are private. For eaxample,such as ( NASA, TIGA) e.t.c.

Furthermore,if there are several institu are private in whole over the world ,which is bring about poverty is increasing day by day,such as (Asian cuntries) ,if government opening new companies this is benefical for all of the people in their country.Which countries, open the government compnies they wealthy and rich ,such as Japan, China,USA e.t.c.

Moreover,reserch lads are very important all of the humanty, because ,if they any outbreake then reserchers made a madicain in this problem and if, they are labs be governmetn then people recive free madicain and if, they company wilol be private then they can sale madican lot of prices .

In concluion ,government should help every needy papulation and curently ,open the lot of government labs that is benefical for every people who live it.I think that is a majorty of this problem they can not achive benefit some big compny owner benefit in this.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear preference for government involvement, especially in the conclusion, and relevantly discuss employment, access to medicine and the cost of privately supplied treatments. However, the opening is difficult to interpret and appears to support private companies as well as government, so your position is not consistently clear. Several claims, such as linking private research directly to rising poverty and describing countries as wealthy because they open government companies, need clearer explanation or evidence. The examples “NASA, TIGA” and “Japan, China, USA” are named but not connected convincingly to your argument. The response is also 244 words, six words below the required minimum; the 10 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop your reasons and examples more fully and state your position clearly from the introduction.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

Your response has an introduction, several body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposting such as “Firstly,” “Furthermore,” and “Moreover” shows an attempt to organise the discussion. However, the overall progression is difficult to follow because ideas are repeated or connected without a clear relationship. For example, the second paragraph moves from government interest to poverty, unemployment and private companies, while the next again links private institutions with poverty before introducing government companies. Some linking words are used mechanically, and references such as “this” and “they” do not always make clear which idea or group you mean. Give each paragraph one main point, explain it in a logical sequence, and use linking expressions only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “research labs,” “unemployment,” “researchers,” and “medicine,” and you use some topic-specific ideas about funding and access to treatment. However, the range is limited and many spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts of the response hard to understand, for example “madical founderd projects,” “institue,” and “benefical.” Some phrases are also unnatural or unclear, such as “a big lead to in poverty” and “sale madican lot of prices.” These problems sometimes strain the reader’s understanding, rather than simply making the writing less polished. Build a reliable set of correctly spelled topic words and practise using them in natural collocations, such as “fund research,” “create jobs,” and “make treatment affordable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using “because,” “if,” and “while,” which shows some effort to use more than simple sentence patterns. However, these complex sentences are often faulty, and errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries frequently make the meaning difficult to follow. For instance, “government take not intrest” lacks correct subject–verb agreement and sentence structure, while “if government opening new companies” does not form a correct conditional clause. Several sentences also run together or begin with fragments, as in “Which countries, open the government compnies they wealthy and rich.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build controlled conditional and cause-and-effect sentences. Check each sentence for a clear subject and verb, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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