Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the present time,many medical research projects are funded by private companies.

I see eye to eye with the argument that research should be carried by private companies.

The objective of every research company is reasearch on different projects it could be related to any field project and then they will start working on it.As the private company are owned by an individual,All private companies first set the budget for every project then they work on it and it is done by proper management and there are different sectors and they are responsible of every done task and responds the management .However as for as government project concern is although, they also do research project with utter consiousnes but their are few loop holes in their management because the people of management gets fund from government but they do not spend enough money while doing research projects because they are not honest and they are biased and they have their own personal objectives and with no money the work cannot be done and also because of the management many other problem raises .

Additonally, When projects are given to private companies when the research is done by them companies have links with other business organizations like UNO, they often get funds from them.

For example,My father is working as a operational supervisor in private company with the name of Capital Strategies Group and they work in similar manner and they get fund from different organizations for the development of certain project .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear preference for private companies, and the points about project budgeting, management, and access to funding are relevant to the question. However, the response addresses the issue only partially: it gives little explanation of why private funding is preferable for medical research specifically, and it does not consider the role of individuals. The claim that government managers are dishonest or biased is broad and unsupported, while the example about your father’s company concerns project funding generally rather than medical research. The response contains 236 words, so it is 14 words below the required minimum; 17 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. Develop a medical-research example and explain how private funding could benefit patients or scientific progress.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Your position appears near the beginning, and you use some linking expressions, including “However” and “Additionally,” to signal contrast and addition. These give the reader a basic sense of how the points relate. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the main argument, contrast with government funding, and example are not clearly separated. Several ideas are joined into very long sentences, making the progression difficult to follow; the discussion of private-company management, government shortcomings, and external funding runs together. The final example also does not clearly connect back to medical research. Use separate paragraphs for your position and reasons, the comparison with government, and a relevant example, and make each paragraph develop one main point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to organisations and funding, such as “budget,” “management,” “funds,” and “development,” and the reader can generally understand your intended argument. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repeated or imprecise, including “research projects,” “work on it,” and “different organizations.” Some word choices and collocations make the meaning less natural, as in “responsible of every done task” and “many other problem raises.” Spelling errors such as “reasearch,” “consiousnes,” and “Additonally” are also noticeable. Aim for more precise terms connected to medical research, such as “clinical trials,” “research funding,” and “scientific oversight,” and check spelling and common word combinations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to express complex relationships, particularly in the long sentence contrasting private and government projects, and you use some simple sentence forms to state your position and give an example. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow. For instance, “As the private company are owned by an individual,All private companies first set the budget” has agreement and sentence-boundary problems, while “the people of management gets fund” has subject–verb and article errors. Commas and full stops are frequently missing, creating run-on sentences, and the final example also contains awkward sentence construction. Break long sentences into shorter units, check subject–verb agreement and articles, and proofread punctuation.

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