Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In current time there are so many new reseach projects where private organizations have provided financial assistance. I personally believe that it is not necessary to acquire funding from perticular organization, persons or government but complete the research in a good way is more important.

On the one hand, there are so many researchers in current time need a financial support for their research study. Also, private companies are interested to be known as a brand among the people. In addition, these organizations also interested in the outcome and results of the research, and if the research would be success they will got a large amount of returns and popularity. For example, AFD- a private plastic industry, provided a large amount of fundings into the research about the prosthetics made by the plastic. Which might be helpful for the organization too in a good way.

On the other hand, Government fundings are helpful too because it would charge a less amount of interest on that. But it requires the explainations, good planning and a study project which is strong enough for earning the trust of government. While, the individual fundings sometimes becomes stressful because of the too much interference of the person who provided the funds.

In my opinion the conduction of research and to get a appropriate results are the vital components for the researcher. Because it does not matter from where the fund is coming and who are the investors when you have a clear ambition and a good planning about the medical research.

To conclude, However, there are lots of private companies in current time which provides funds to the medical research but it is not necessary to aim for fund from perticular organization. Conduction and completion of research is more important.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear general view that the quality and completion of research matter more than who funds it, and you discuss private, government and individual funding. The examples about a private company supporting prosthetics research and the requirements for government funding are relevant. However, the position does not fully answer which source you think should carry out or fund research: saying that the source does not matter leaves the central choice unresolved. Several points are also asserted rather than explained, such as the claim that government funding charges less interest and that private companies gain returns and popularity. Develop these reasons with clearer links to medical research and state whether one funding source is preferable, or why a balanced approach is best.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs presenting different funding sources, a personal view and a conclusion. The contrast markers “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” help signal the discussion. However, progression is weakened because the main position—that the source of funding does not matter—is repeated in both the introduction and conclusion without being developed into a clear comparison. Some links are mechanical or unclear, particularly “While, the individual fundings…” and the transition from the government’s requirements to individual interference. The conclusion begins with “To conclude, However,” which combines two signals awkwardly. Organise each paragraph around one reason, explain how it supports your position, and use referencing and transitions more precisely.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “financial assistance,” “outcome,” “returns,” “interference” and “medical research,” so the reader can follow the general discussion. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive. For example, “a large amount of fundings” and “the conduction of research” are unnatural, while “research would be success” uses the wrong form. “Current time” is repeated and is not a natural way to refer to the present. Spelling errors such as “reseach,” “perticular” and “explainations” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of phrases for funding and research, and check spelling and word forms when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including conditional structures such as “if the research would be success” and a relative clause beginning “Which might be helpful.” These attempts show some range, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “private companies are interested to be known,” “they will got,” and “it would charge a less amount of interest”; these contain faulty verb patterns or forms. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “to get a appropriate results” and the fragment “Which might be helpful…”. Practise accurate verb patterns and conditional forms, and check that each sentence has a complete main clause. More reliable control of these structures would make your reasoning clearer.

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