Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Today many research projects in the field of medical science are supported and funded by private organizations but i think there should be involvement of government or individuals along with private companies for various reasons which we will discuss further.

On one hand I think if the only private companies fund the research projects than only they control resultant product or output howevery way they choose to like private businesses only think about their own benefits and earnings so this way nothing will be supported or funded for the cause of the development of the society or community or to support the economic growth. For example Elon Musks company neural link is working on developing a scientific computing chip that will fit with brain inside head and it allows patients to move mouse cursors, type and operate robotic arms entirely through thoughts this is funded by a private company.

On the other hand if government gets involved in medical research projects than for the betterment of the country or community government will provide opportunities by launching schemes or some thing similar which ever will be the suitable way according to the project being worked on or availability of the result product will be easy and accessible to everyone . For example another company working on the similar neuralink project but backed by government support so that the computing chips will be available for everyone to test and use.

In conclusion I think medical research funding should not be done only be provided by the private businesses but also by the government because accessibility and availability of the output that research depends on it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear overall view that medical research should not be funded solely by private companies, and you explain a relevant concern: private funders may prioritise their own interests over public benefit. The discussion of government support also connects to accessibility. However, the task asks you to consider private companies, individuals, or government, and individuals are not meaningfully discussed. The examples about Neuralink illustrate private research, but the proposed government-backed project is hypothetical and does not clearly show how public funding would improve access. Some claims, such as private research not supporting society or economic growth, need qualification and fuller explanation. Address each funding option and develop your reasons with more specific, convincing support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs signposted by “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This gives the reader an overall route through your argument. However, progression within the paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are packed into long sentences, and the links between claims are not always clear. For example, the first body paragraph moves from private control to company motives and then to social and economic development without explaining each connection. The conclusion repeats the main position but its final clause is unclear. Use clearer sentence boundaries and make each paragraph develop one main point in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “medical research projects,” “private organizations,” “government support,” and “accessibility,” so the main subject is clear. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as “computing chip” and “robotic arms.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or combinations are inaccurate or awkward, including “resultant product,” “for the cause of the development,” and “availability of the result product.” Spelling and written forms such as “howevery” and “some thing” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural collocations and avoid repeating broad terms such as “research,” “project,” and “available.” For instance, distinguish between funding research, developing a treatment, and making a product accessible to the public.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional and subordinate structures, as in “if the only private companies fund the research projects…” and “if government gets involved…”. These attempts show a willingness to express cause and consequence, but complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow. Examples include “if the only private companies fund … than only they control,” the incomplete construction “howevery way they choose to,” and “should not be done only be provided.” There are also errors in articles, agreement, and punctuation, such as “with brain inside head” and the run-on sentences in both body paragraphs. Break long sentences into shorter units, check verb forms and clause structure, and use full stops to make relationships between ideas clear.

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