Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, most of research related to medical profession are funded by private companies. In my opinion, yes research should carried out by all the entities whether private companies, government sector or people.

When private companies are carrying out some research projects, It will benefit both the people and as well as the firms themselves. As the people got certain job opportunities related to their specific research area of their field and also a best opportunity for young graduates to persue their further studies in specialization. Another benefit of research is that it increased the knowledge of citezens of a particular country. For example, the health sector in pakistan carried out a research about the negative effects of using necotine pouches. By responce of which many young adults quickly eradicate the use of such addictive ietems. All this happens because they read the research that was carried out.

Government should also play an important role in research by allocating some budget for it. This kind of step will provide lots of benefits for our country. As the global image will increased and more international organizaions will take part in our nations research. Which as a result improve jobs market and more financial stability will be provided to the people. The individuals are required that if their budget allows them to carry out a specific research related to their field then they must probably co that. Government should also gave some extra funding to the private firms so that they can carried a profound research.

In the conclusion we can say that both private institutions, government sector

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response5.5
Coherence and Cohesion5.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear general view that research should involve private companies, government and individuals, and you offer relevant points about employment, public knowledge and government funding. The example about research into nicotine pouches helps illustrate a possible public-health benefit. However, the response only partly develops the question: it does not explain why responsibility should be shared among these groups or compare their distinct roles in enough detail. The point about individuals is especially brief, and the conclusion ends before completing the position. To strengthen the response, explain the advantages and limitations of each source of funding, support each main claim with a specific example, and finish with a complete summary of your view.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, a paragraph on private companies, a paragraph on government and individuals, and an attempted conclusion. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “For example” signal supporting detail. However, progression between ideas is not consistently clear. The second body paragraph moves from government funding to national image, jobs, individual research and private-firm funding without clearly linking these points. Several sentences begin with “As” or “Which,” leaving their relationship to the preceding idea unclear, while “In the conclusion” introduces an unfinished ending. Group related ideas into focused paragraphs, use linking expressions to show cause and contrast accurately, and ensure the conclusion completes the argument.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “medical research,” “job opportunities,” “international organizations” and “financial stability,” which helps communicate the subject. There are also attempts at more specific wording, such as “negative effects” and “addictive items.” However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form and collocation errors make parts less clear, including “persue,” “citezens,” “necotine,” “responce” and “organizations.” Phrases such as “a best opportunity” and “global image will increased” are also unnatural. Build accuracy by checking spelling and learning common academic combinations, for example “conduct research,” “allocate funding” and “raise public awareness.” This would make your ideas more precise and easier to follow.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea about individuals’ budgets and a cause-and-effect example. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to interpret. Examples include “research should carried out,” “the health sector … carried out a research,” and “the global image will increased.” Subject–verb agreement and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “research … are funded” and “it increased the knowledge.” Some sentence fragments, such as “Which as a result improve jobs market,” further weaken clarity. Practise complete sentence patterns, especially auxiliary verbs, articles, agreement and verb forms, then proofread each sentence to check that it has a clear subject and main verb.

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