Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

TODAY, SO MANY MEDICAL INNOVATION PROJECTS ARE FUNDED AND SUPPORTED BY PRIVATE INSTITUTIONS. MEANWHILE, I WOULD AGREE WITH ABOVE STATEMENT TO MAJOR EXTENT AND REASON TO SUPPORT THE IT WILL BE EXPLAINED IN THE ENSURING PARAGRAPHS, ALONG WITH EXAMPLES.

DISCUSSING THE REASONS TO SIPPORT THE ARGREEMENT, THE MOST EVIDENT ONE IS MEDICAL RESEARCH NEED LARGE AMOUNT OF HUMAN RESOURSE AND MACHINARY RESOURSE. THIS SOURSES NEEDS HIGH BUDGET AND MORDERN TECHNOLOGY. FOR EXAMPLE, MODERN LEBORATORY, HIGH PROFILE AND WELL KNOWN EXPERIENCED SCIENTISTS AND DOCTORS TAKE HIGH CHARGE FOR RESEARCH. PRIVATE COMPANIES PROVID THESE TYPE OF ALL THE RESOURSES AND SCIENTIFIC EQUIPMENT. FOR INSTANCE, THE PRIVATE COMPANIES LIKE SERUM, SUN FARMA ALL PRIVATE COMAPNIES FUNDED MEDICAL RESEARCH BECAUSE THEY HAVE ALL SUFFICIENT RESOURCES REGARDING TO NEW RESEARCH.

FURTHERMORE, ANOTHER ONE SUPOORTING REASON FOR MY BELIEF IS DEVELOPING COUNTRIES FOCUS MORE ON THE FUNDMENTAL NEEDS OF PUBLIC LIKE FOOD, BASIC MEDICAL FACILITY, ACCOMONDATION, LAW AND ORDER. FINANCIALLY STRUGALING COUNTRIES LIKE AFRICAN COUNTRIES, MIDDLE EAST NATIONS FOCUSE MORE TO ESTABLISH THEIR STRONG INTERNAL FACILITIES.

ONE PROMINENT EXAMPLE IS INDIA SPEND LOTS OF MONEY AND RESOURSES TO SECURE THEIR BORDERS AND DEAL WITH THE TERORRISUM.

HOWEVER, MANY GOVERNMENT PROVID THE FUND AND RESOURSE FOR MEDICAL RESEARCH. DEVELOPED NATIONS LIKE USA, RUSSIA AND EUROPEAN COUNTRIES FUNDED MANY MEDICAL RESEARCH IN THE HISTORY. EVEN THOUGH MANY GOVERNMENT ALSO RUN SPECIAL FUNDING PROGRAM FOR RESEARCH. FOR EXAMLE, BHARAT BIOTECH IS GOVERNMENT ORGANIZATION WHO INVENT THE COVID-19 VACCINE IN INDIA.

IN CONCLUSION, IN THIS CONTEMPORARY ERA, THERE IS EQUALLY POTENTIAL EVIDENCE TO SUPPORT THE ARGUNMENT I HAVE PROVIDED, HENCE, IN MY OPINION MEDICAL RESERCH SHOULD BE CARRIED BY ALL THE ORGANIZATION GOVERNMENT, INDIVIDUALS OR PRIVATE SECTOR.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing the role of private companies and governments in medical research. However, the position is somewhat contradictory; the introduction states agreement with private funding, but the conclusion suggests that all sectors should be involved. The development of ideas is limited; for example, the point about developing countries focusing on basic needs is relevant but lacks a clear connection to why this necessitates private funding over government funding. The examples provided, such as 'Serum' and 'Sun Pharma', are relevant, but the overall argument lacks depth and a cohesive stance throughout the essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'For example', 'For instance', 'Furthermore'). There are instances where the logical progression is weak, particularly in the transition between the discussion of private companies and the mention of government funding. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the flow between sentences feels disjointed at times. While the paragraphing is present, the internal cohesion within paragraphs needs more variety and sophistication to reach a higher band.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'SIPPORT', 'ARGREEMENT', 'LEBORATORY', 'COMAPNIES', and 'TERORRISUM', which distract the reader. The range of vocabulary is limited to basic terms, and there is little attempt to use less common or more sophisticated lexical items. While the meaning is generally clear, the repetitive nature of the word choice and the consistent spelling issues prevent a higher score. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic collocations would be beneficial.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'This sourses needs'), article usage (e.g., 'take high charge'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'reason to support the it will be explained'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common grammatical slips before moving on to more complex structures.

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