Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
In during day, numerous medical research projects on funded like private companies and government companies. They are almost medical research projects on government because more expensive thing and some private companies are research medicine on funded there not highly cost use on medicine research.
On one hand, today several diseases on my country like diabetes and thyroid symptoms so find medicine both companies private and government but government hospital are lowest price of medicine disease compare to private hospital. For instance, 5 years ago covid time more exorbitant of medicine at that time research of government.
On other hand, many medical research like drugs because drugs are control diabetes so mostly private companies research on funded and today mostly students study on doctor of pharmacy. For example, In my state Gujarat many private company manufacturing of medicine. name of Torrent Pharmaceuticals and one another Zydus Lifesciences this companies on fund research medicine. These companies also provide internship opportunities for students, allowing them to gain practical experience in the pharmaceutical industry. Private companies invest in research to develop medicines for diseases such as diabetes, cancer and heart disease. They can use modern technology and laboratories to improve the quality and effectiveness of medicines. Private funding can help researchers conduct studies more quickly because companies have dedicated research teams and resources. Pharmaceutical research creates jobs for pharmacists, scientists, laboratory technicians and clinical researchers.
In my opinion, both governments and private companies should contribute to medical research. However, I believe that private companies should play a greater role because they have more financial resources, advanced technology and skilled researchers. Their investment can accelerate the development of new medicines and treatments. At the same time, governments should regulate this research to ensure that medicines are safe, affordable and accessible to everyone.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the roles of private companies and government in medical research. You clearly state your position in the conclusion that both should contribute, with a preference for private sector leadership. However, the first two paragraphs are significantly underdeveloped and suffer from unclear expression, which makes it difficult to follow your reasoning. While you provide examples like Torrent Pharmaceuticals and Zydus Lifesciences, the initial arguments regarding government funding are fragmented. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and fully explains the 'why' behind your opinions rather than listing points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the logical flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between ideas are often missing or mechanical, such as the abrupt shift in the second paragraph. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult to track the subject of your sentences. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother progression of ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'medicine' and 'companies'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'In during day' and 'more exorbitant of medicine', which hinder clarity. While you successfully use some industry-specific terms like 'pharmaceutical industry' and 'clinical researchers', the overall range is not sufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To improve, try to incorporate more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition and enhance the sophistication of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with sentence structure, articles, and verb forms (e.g., 'research on funded', 'government hospital are lowest price'). Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper subject-verb agreement, which forces the reader to work harder to understand your meaning. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction—ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb—before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect prepositions will also significantly improve your score.
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