Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In present scenario, Medical reseurch is very essential field for country and people as well, Therefore, there are meny private companies, who are working on different kind medical reseurch project for well-being of people of country. Thus, Every organization, or individual on government should work on medical advancement project for favouring Nation's health. Further point regarding the statement are as follows. As considering reseurch on medical project by private companies, it will provide mass production with different alternative to the whole population of the country. It will also give cheaper rate of the medical aid to the residents But, The government should establish certein rules and regubation for muking reseurch on medical. And These should be proper inspection and deligation on the private company by the government for such kind of medical researches.
The reseurch by private company on Individual make good growth on medical depurtment which will develop country's health rate higher and make country independent for health treatment and medications By collective growth on medical field, Country can also certein Export of the new researched Medication and aids to the other country, which creates drastic growth in profit. for example, Serem Institute of india made exclusive covid-19 vaccine and provide it to meny country for saving Peoples life.
In conclusion, The growth of the country can be possible by collective efforts of government, individual and private compenies in every field, especially in medical field.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the role of private companies in medical research, but it fails to fully explore the roles of individuals and the government as requested. The ideas are somewhat underdeveloped, and the essay is under the minimum word count, which negatively impacts the depth of the argument. While a position is stated, the lack of sufficient word count prevents a fully developed response. To improve, you should ensure that each stakeholder mentioned in the prompt is given a dedicated paragraph or clear section to ensure a balanced and comprehensive discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into three short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as starting sentences with 'Further point' or 'Thus'. Paragraphing is present but the content within the paragraphs lacks a clear flow, making the transition between ideas feel abrupt. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'reseurch', 'meny', 'certein', 'regubation', 'muking', and 'depurtment'. These errors are distracting and occasionally impede the reader's understanding. The range of vocabulary is basic, and there is little attempt to use less common or academic collocations. To reach a higher band, you must focus on accurate spelling and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to medical research and economic development.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with article usage ('the government', 'the medical aid'), subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, which makes the text difficult to follow. There is a limited range of complex structures, and the attempts at them are often inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.
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