Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays,many medical field plan are handled by private companies.The medical research also carried out different types of companies and government.According to my opinion i realized that research carry by individuals and government.There are following reason to support my answer.
First of all,the main important reason is that theses medical field are research out by companies because these companies are elligible for many communication through all over the world.For example many medical researches are completed by the incharge of these companies my uncle is head of one private company who surveyed all the research.
Second of all,the crucial reason is that the government is also carried these researches and also responsible for that.It is also responsible for public health it does not make money it also check their all youth.For example during the corona virus in different countries government is responible for all this matters.
On the other hand at that time many medical fields are handled by private companies in which government and also individual are not involved and only private company did not plan out these researches as a result they do not compete and lose at the end.
As sum up,i think at present time most and different kinds of researches are acheived by private hospitiality individuals or chatteries or government of country.At the end government is responsible for all these process.Private companies and individuals play a valueable role while government should take primary intake for medical researches.As short the second one view is correct and i also give some reason to support my answer
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the roles of private companies and the government in medical research. However, the position is not consistently clear or well-developed. While you mention that research should be carried out by individuals and the government, the supporting arguments are underdeveloped and sometimes confusing, such as the anecdote about your uncle or the vague reference to 'checking their all youth'. The conclusion is somewhat contradictory, suggesting that while private companies play a role, the government should take the lead, but the reasoning throughout the body paragraphs lacks the depth required for a higher band. To improve, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, clear argument supported by logical reasoning and relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed, and the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate. For example, 'As sum up' and 'As short' are non-standard transitions. Referencing is also problematic; in the second paragraph, the phrase 'it does not make money it also check their all youth' is unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical flow. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') and ensure that each sentence logically follows the previous one to create a smoother, more coherent argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and incorrect collocations, such as 'medical field plan', 'research out', and 'private hospitiality'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'medical research' and 'corona virus', the overall range is insufficient to express complex ideas precisely. To improve, focus on learning collocations (words that naturally go together) and avoid translating directly from your native language. Expanding your vocabulary through reading academic texts will help you use more precise and natural-sounding language in your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('government is also carried these researches'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which affects the clarity of your message. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the ones attempted often contain errors that cause confusion. For example, 'private company did not plan out these researches as a result they do not compete' lacks necessary punctuation and grammatical markers. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subjects and verbs agree, and using correct punctuation to separate independent clauses.
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