Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In recent years, the private sector has been financing the research and development more than government bodies in the field of medicine. I strongly believe that private companies such has pharmaceutical companies can revolutionize this field with high-grade medical equipment and funding resources.

Private companies, corporations, either by themselves or through networks have access to better tools such as high-powered microscopes, cluster of computers for medical computation and much more. These machineries can pinpoint the bacteria causing problems, compute a solution, provide a cure based on the cluster's knowledge base and predict future behaviors. Cause and effect graphing allows medical professionals to undertake precautionary measures beforehand. Furthermore, the technology used by these companies is advanced enough to calculate chances of developing cancer by determining the growth rate of the cancer cells. On the other hand, Government bodies, must undergo a lengthy process of filing, billing, finding cheapest tender, and may end up taking years before these facilities get their firsthand experience on these machines.

In addition to machinery, the private sector also has access to significant capital to fund medical research. The field of healthcare and medicine is ever-growing and attract the interests of investors, venture capitalists due to its tremendous potential in terms of returns. In contrast, government allots budgets to every field. These budgets put a limit on expenditure thus, making it difficult for researchers to acquire necessary equipment and resources to move forward with their work.

In conclusion, private sector with access to huge capital along with high-power, state-of-the-art machineries are evolving the field of medicine with every passing day and I stand by this opinion. Government institutions, despite changing policies and schemes, have a long way to go before they can compete with the private sector on equal footing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses the prompt by clearly stating a position in favor of private sector funding. The ideas are relevant and supported by arguments regarding technological superiority and capital availability. However, the response is somewhat unbalanced; while it extensively discusses private companies, it provides less depth regarding the role of government or individuals. The argument could be strengthened by acknowledging the potential drawbacks of private funding (e.g., profit-driven research) to provide a more nuanced perspective. Overall, the position is clear throughout, and the main ideas are well-developed, meeting the requirements for a Band 7.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used effectively to separate the two main arguments: technological advantages and financial resources. Cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition to', and 'In contrast' are used to guide the reader through the argument. However, some transitions are slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother in the second paragraph. The referencing is generally clear, and the progression of ideas is logical, which is consistent with the Band 7 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the intended meaning with some precision. The student uses topic-specific terms like 'pharmaceutical companies', 'venture capitalists', and 'precautionary measures'. There are some minor collocation issues, such as 'get their firsthand experience on these machines' and 'allots budgets to every field', which sound slightly unnatural. However, the range is adequate for the task, and the errors do not impede communication. The student demonstrates an ability to use less common vocabulary, which supports a Band 6.5, rounded to 6.0 due to the occasional awkward phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'private companies such has pharmaceutical companies' (should be 'as'), 'Government bodies, must undergo' (unnecessary comma), and 'private sector with access to huge capital' (missing article 'the'). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede the reader's understanding of the argument. The student attempts complex structures, but the control is not consistent enough for a higher band. The frequency of errors suggests a Band 6 level, where the writer demonstrates a mix of structures but lacks the consistent accuracy required for a 7.

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