Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
There is an ongoing debate on whether the considerable rise in the research in medical field projects due to which many medical research projects are invested by many organizations that can be carried out by private companies , people or high authorities . In this essay i will discuss my opinion why funds are invested by both government and private companies in my upcoming paragraphs . To begin with , ample of reasons are there why government invest money on medical research projects ? First and foremost reason is taxes . to be more precise , there are many companies that invest huge amount of money on medical facilities that and they also pay taxes to government . in addition if they gives funds for medical they get more facilities for there commmerial use. A survey which was conducted by British broad casting revealed that 89% of private companies pay taxes to government for medical research projects to continues projects . On the other hand , there are some reason why private companies should invest money on medical research programs ? First of all , less burden to clarify it there are many responsibilities of government which provides many resources to communities if private companies can invest funds on medical researches then it will reduce the stress from government who take action to control other organizations . An article reveled that 8out of 10 big firms pay funds to grow medical researches for future benefits . In conclusion , although there are many reasons why it is beneficial for individuals to use medical facilities .if both invest funds on this then it will be proven beneficial not only for one but also for whole society
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the roles of government and private companies in medical research. However, the position is not fully developed. The arguments regarding 'taxes' and 'reducing stress on government' are somewhat superficial and lack logical depth. The prompt asks for an opinion on whether research should be carried out by private companies, individuals, or government, but the essay focuses primarily on funding rather than the actual execution of research. The conclusion is vague and does not clearly summarize the stance taken. To improve, you should provide more specific examples of why one entity might be more effective than another in conducting research, rather than just focusing on financial investment.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by awkward phrasing and unclear transitions. While cohesive devices like 'To begin with' and 'On the other hand' are used, they are sometimes followed by sentences that do not clearly link to the previous point. The referencing is occasionally confusing, such as the phrase 'if both invest funds on this' in the conclusion, which lacks a clear antecedent. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the development of your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. There are several instances of imprecise word choice, such as 'high authorities' instead of 'government' and 'ample of reasons' (which is grammatically incorrect). You rely on basic vocabulary and struggle with collocations. For example, 'invest money on' should be 'invest money in'. There are also spelling errors like 'commmerial' and 'reveled'. To reach a higher band, you need to demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary and use it with more precision, avoiding repetitive phrasing and ensuring that your word choices are appropriate for an academic context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as the opening sentence which is a long, run-on fragment that lacks a clear main verb. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, for example, 'if they gives funds' and 'government who take action'. Punctuation is also problematic, with unnecessary spaces before commas and periods. While there is an attempt to use complex sentences, they are often faulty, leading to a lack of clarity. You should focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures.
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