Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Yes i agree with this statement, many projects are funded by private companies because they want to increase their revenue.
In my opinion, research should be carried by government because government is responsible for the better health facilities for citizens because government collects tax from people. So, government should spend on medical research projects for the betterment of hospitals. In many developed countries government is funded for medical projects because government think that citizens gave tax and they have rights of medical facilities.
Individuals are also funded because some individuals who can afford are much concerned about health facilities in their country. They also do working on social services.
In my country, there are also research projects funded by private companies because they want to sale their products and generate more revenue. Mostly medicine companies funded medical research projects because i mentioned above they want to increase their sales. There are some exceptional cases when companies funded for research projects with government collaboration.
In conclusion, government is responsible to funded in medical research projects rather than private companies or individuals because they will only think about their financial benefits. They are not much concerned about citizens of a country.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you state a clear position that the government should fund medical research, the arguments are repetitive and lack depth. You mention that private companies focus on revenue and the government on public health, but these points are not sufficiently extended or supported with specific, well-developed examples. The discussion regarding individuals is particularly underdeveloped. To improve, you must expand your arguments with more detailed reasoning and concrete examples to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive analysis of the topic.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the progression of ideas is limited by the brevity of the text. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive or simplistic, such as the frequent use of 'because' and 'so'. Paragraphing is present, but the logical flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. To achieve a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and phrases (e.g., 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'in contrast') to connect your ideas more fluidly and improve the overall logical progression of your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for basic communication but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on simple, repetitive terms like 'funded', 'projects', and 'companies'. There are also some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'sale their products' instead of 'sell their products' and 'government is funded for medical projects' when you mean 'government funds medical projects'. To improve, you should focus on learning more academic collocations and synonyms to express your ideas with greater precision and variety.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'government is responsible to funded'), incorrect verb forms, and missing articles. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence construction is often repetitive. To improve, you should practice using a wider range of complex sentence structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, and pay closer attention to verb tense consistency and article usage to reduce the frequency of errors.
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