Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
In the world their are many medical project start across the world sponsared by the government and by the private companies. Today time many medical research project are finance by private limiteds. This essay advocate by the opinion on research carried by the private companies or individuals handle by the government.
To start with this in nowdays their are so many medical research project are handle by the private companies because the by the handle the private companies focus of the main point of research it is very important aand giving to the funds like investment on the research. Increase their sells of the companies and making the reputation of the companies for the fame and publicity.
If the government give the funds to the research project their are so many percpective to not fullfimment the funds because of the politics in all world some people unknown from this. it is very important for all the people can
In my opinion private companies should be provide the funds t the healthcare department because by this they can help the soo many people who can survive from the unknown disease and giving the chance to live their life .
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AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the prompt but fails to develop a coherent argument. While you state a preference for private funding, the ideas are underdeveloped and often repetitive. The final paragraph contains a significant amount of incoherent, repetitive text ('djd the funds to thedd dd dd...'), which severely undermines the task response. To improve, you must ensure each paragraph presents a clear, logical point supported by relevant examples, and avoid filler or nonsensical text. The position is present but lacks the depth and clarity required for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the internal structure of the paragraphs is weak. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as 'To start with this in nowdays'. The transition between ideas is abrupt, and the repetition of phrases makes the text difficult to follow. The inclusion of the incoherent string of characters at the end of the essay completely disrupts the flow and coherence of the writing. You need to focus on using linking words effectively and ensuring each sentence builds logically upon the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'sponsared' instead of 'sponsored', 'private limiteds' instead of 'private companies', and 'percpective' instead of 'perspective'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas, and the repetition of basic words like 'funds', 'research', and 'companies' indicates a lack of lexical variety. To improve, you should practice using synonyms and learning the correct collocations for academic topics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay. There are frequent errors in basic sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and article usage, such as 'In the world their are many medical project' and 'This essay advocate by the opinion'. Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. Punctuation is also inconsistent. The frequent errors often impede communication, making it difficult for the reader to understand your intended meaning. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction before attempting more complex structures.
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