Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Me and my friend go on a morning walk and discus about the medical research because my friend can got a job in research center .

Nowadays, in my country many research center will be open and my friend got a job in research center . He asked me to about the medical researches . I ask him to about the different private companies should be interested in a medical researches .

First of all , he asked me to the government is not interested in the medical researches but the private companies is to interested in making new research center in different location such as forests , cities and many other places such as in space .

Second of all , my friend tell me about the government is included in a medical researches . The government ca take a money in advance for open a new research center . The private companies pay the government such as , the city M.b.din research center pay a 60,000 in advance and per day he pay 6000 to the government .

In my opinion, the government should open its own research center in different locations for the local people can got many facilities to their research center . The local people can got a job in the government research center . The people can got a interest in a medical researches . I cannot have an experience but my friend is very interested in medical research center and have many knowlege about it .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to address the prompt effectively. The task asks for an opinion on whether medical research should be funded by private companies, individuals, or the government. Instead of providing a structured argument, the essay is written as a narrative about a conversation with a friend. The ideas presented, such as the specific financial details of a 'M.b.din research center,' are irrelevant and do not contribute to a coherent discussion of the topic. The position is not clearly developed or supported with logical reasoning, and the response lacks the formal tone required for an Academic Task 2 essay.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The narrative structure makes it difficult to follow the writer's argument. Cohesive devices are used in a very mechanical and repetitive way, such as 'First of all' and 'Second of all,' which do not effectively link the ideas. The referencing is unclear, and the overall flow of the essay is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to identify the main points or the writer's stance on the issue.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The writer relies on basic words and phrases, such as 'got a job,' 'medical researches,' and 'different places.' There is a lack of precision and a failure to use academic or topic-specific vocabulary related to medical research or funding models. Errors in word choice, such as 'I cannot have an experience' instead of 'I do not have experience,' are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammar is highly inaccurate throughout the text. There are persistent errors in verb tense ('my friend can got a job'), subject-verb agreement ('private companies is to interested'), and article usage ('the government is not interested in the medical researches'). The sentence structures are simple and often contain errors that distort the meaning. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the frequent grammatical mistakes make the text difficult to read and understand.

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