Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Most of the medical research projects are funded by private companies nowadays. I would argue that research should be carried out by private organizations because they have the latest tools, technologies and highly educated researchers.
On the one hand, some people believe that research should be carried out by the government, because they do not have any budget issues. Furthermore, the government can do research on a large scale. The majority of people also think that the research does not benefit the government on a large scale and they are unprofitable. For instance, the government should give funds to universities and research centers to do research on a specific topic. The government should do research on rare diseases which are found in some people, so that they can treat their disease and make their life much better. Individuals can also do research to help the government and private companies. Individuals can find the solution to a problem and then they are tested by private companies and the government labs.
On the other hand, most people agree that research should be done by private companies because they do not have any financial constraints. Moreover, they are ready to invest more and more on research because they wants to make profit from their research at the end. Private companies have also advanced labs and highly educated researchers to perform their work in a much better way. For example, at the time of COVID-19 many private companies invested a lot of money to develop vaccines for the disease. Private companies are always competing with other companies so that they can find a better vaccine for cancer patients.
To conclude, I totally agree with that research should be carried out by private companies because they can invest more in research and have advanced technologies and labs. The government and individual researchers can also benefit the research work.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing the roles of private companies, the government, and individuals. You maintain a clear position throughout, advocating for private funding. However, the development of ideas is somewhat uneven. While you provide a relevant example regarding COVID-19 vaccines, other points, such as the role of individuals, are under-developed and lack specific supporting evidence. To reach a higher band, ensure that every claim is supported by a concrete example or a deeper explanation of the 'why' and 'how' behind your arguments, rather than just stating the benefits.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into clear paragraphs, and there is a logical progression of ideas. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'On the one hand,' 'On the other hand,' and 'To conclude' to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel mechanical, and the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved. For instance, the transition between the government's role and the individual's role in the first body paragraph is abrupt. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences flow more naturally into one another would improve the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to express your ideas clearly. You use some topic-specific terms like 'financial constraints,' 'invest,' and 'vaccines.' However, the range is somewhat limited, and there is a tendency to repeat simple phrases like 'do research' and 'private companies.' To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms and collocations. For example, instead of repeating 'do research,' you could use 'conduct scientific investigations,' 'pioneer medical breakthroughs,' or 'allocate resources for clinical trials.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'they wants to make profit') and minor punctuation or article errors. Your control over complex structures is inconsistent; some sentences are well-formed, while others feel slightly awkward. To move up, focus on proofreading for basic errors and attempt to vary your sentence structure further by using more complex subordinating clauses to link your ideas more fluidly.
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