Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

When i see different projects to give many private companies, nowdays in these is very quickly and responsibility in work. The working prosses is very fast better, it is due to the many projects to serve them. If constrary the government facilities is slowly and along time to systematic the projects. Different contractor given projects to private companies.

In recents years the government is firslty to progress the work in projects, the system is on bad hand is badly destroyed the people is abseat not a good impression on ther. However the system could be better any person work honestly and had to spend day by day is strongly to bulit. Therefore the hope to people not break and fouced on Gervnment.

On the other hand this is ot thinks on private companies. The projectly work is much fast and good , to bulit make a better then structure on industry. In a big resonse to pay the employees so good the employees is happy and pleasant, and working is better to see any thinks. In this habibts the people to run way progress, and any person if not follow the rules is sequencly failure, and damaged ourlife to attaced person is sink. Hardness is improtant ourlife and make a big personalty on man.

In conclusion the private companies is much better than government company. This is a good work and make to bulit body ,the mostly people can follow in this way to time is not waste or everybody no disturbe in working. In my opinion this way is good for making projects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by expressing a preference for private companies over government-funded research. However, the development of ideas is significantly hindered by unclear expression and a lack of logical support. While the writer attempts to compare private and government sectors, the arguments are repetitive and lack specific examples or depth. The position is clear, but the supporting points are often abstract or difficult to follow, such as the mention of 'hardness is important ourlife'. To improve, the writer needs to provide concrete examples of medical research projects and explain the benefits or drawbacks of different funding models more clearly and logically.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure of these paragraphs is weak. The progression of ideas is often disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the argument. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused or placed awkwardly, such as 'If constrary the government facilities is slowly'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the relationship between sentences is often confusing. The essay lacks a logical flow, and the transition between the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion is mechanical rather than natural. More attention should be paid to using linking words correctly to connect ideas logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary range is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'projectly work', 'abseat', and 'sink'. The writer struggles to express complex ideas due to a lack of appropriate terminology related to the topic of medical research. Many words are used incorrectly, which often impedes communication. To reach a higher band, the student needs to focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary and common collocations, as well as improving basic spelling and word formation to ensure that the intended meaning is conveyed clearly to the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences that are frequently marred by errors. There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure, such as 'the mostly people can follow in this way to time is not waste'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, and many sentences are grammatically incomplete or incoherent. The frequency of errors is high, which often causes difficulty for the reader in understanding the intended message. The writer should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb forms and word order, before attempting more complex structures.

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