Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Today rapidly evolving world, medical research are boomng in modern era. Moreover, mostly medical sectors are finace by private industies.This essay will articulate reason behind my own opinion.
To commence with reason,that medical research projects must be funded by private companies, to improve medical field. To be more precise, government have not enough money to more support or more envest money on the medical research projects. For example, In many countries do not enough money so, the government must give chance by private companies to spend money in medical research projects to improve medical facility. As a result, medical research projects are more funded by private companies as well as, improve medical situations.
On the other hand, there are some other bright side of the circumstance, as, private companies give more focus on this research. To elaborate furthere on this point, private companies are more invest money on the research because, they spend too much money on the project, they get good profits into the medical projects. For instances, in USA, many private companies envest money on private medical sectors. The USA is number second in the medical sector because of their companies envest huge amount of money. Consequently, the USA is best in medical sector. people are prefer to first USA for their health.
Overall,medical research is significantly importance in modern era. Private companies must be invest money on medical sectors. However, ther are some advantage that private companies spend money medical research projects such as, improve medical sectors, and private sector give good qaulity of medician.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing the role of private companies in funding medical research, taking a clear position in favour of private funding due to government limitations and potential profits. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. For example, the student mentions that governments do not have enough money and that private companies invest for good profits, but these points are under-developed and lack specific, well-reasoned support. Phrases like 'For instance, in USA, many private companies envest money on private medical sectors' attempt to provide examples, but they remain vague and generalized. While all parts of the task are touched upon, the lack of depth and overly generalized arguments place this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates some organization with basic paragraphing and introductory and concluding remarks, but there is a lack of clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or repetitive, such as the excessive use of 'To commence with', 'To be more precise', and 'For instance', many of which are awkwardly phrased or mechanically applied. For instance, the transition 'On the other hand, there are some other bright side of the circumstance' is unnatural. Referencing and substitution are occasionally unclear, making the logical flow disjointed at times. These issues align with the Band 5.0 descriptors for coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with noticeable errors that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader. The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'boomng', 'finace', 'envest', and 'qaulity', but frequent spelling mistakes ('finace' instead of financed, 'envest' instead of invest, 'qaulity' instead of quality) and awkward word choices ('medical research are boomng', 'number second') restrict the range. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic message, the density of lexical errors and lack of precision prevent it from reaching a higher band, making Band 4.5 appropriate, rounded to 5.0 based on standard half-band increments, though 4.5 is also acceptable. Let us evaluate as Band 4.5 or 5.0; given the frequent spelling and word choice errors straining comprehension slightly, Band 4.5 fits well, but adhering strictly to half bands, Band 5.0 represents a limited but minimally adequate range with noticeable errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and awkward attempts at complex structures that are frequently faulty. Numerous grammatical errors are present throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('medical research are boomng', 'government have not enough money'), missing articles ('in USA', 'is best in medical sector'), and incorrect preposition usage ('envest money on'). Punctuation is also problematic with spacing and missing commas. These frequent errors cause strain for the reader and reflect the Band 4.0 to 5.0 descriptors, specifically fitting the Band 4.0 profile due to the high frequency of basic grammatical errors distorting meaning in places.
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