Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Private companies were funded many medical research,nowdays.THe research should be carried by all include private ,individuals and government companies.In this essay,we discuss that which company should carrued the research Body paragarph 1:the reseach should be carried by private companies because nowadays private candidates are very much in the field .They are in this field due to their personal reasons .e.g due to financial problems ,so they work hard for research.One more reason is that the private companies are very brucial in their work.They hire good people like those carried research for them.e.g nishat group company is vey famous in Pakistan .it happens due to theirs hardwork and consistency, Body Paragraph 2: Many research should be carried by just one man .Newton is the man who discoverd gravity and he is the only one who discoverd this ,he does not need majority for this.e.g When he is sitting behind a tree of apple and suddenly one apple fall from tree towards him and then he realise how a apple fall from tree and he discoverd gravity .The other reason is Elon Musk ,he is the most rich man in the world due to his different researches ,he don't need anyone for this ,he do all this alone and prove the world that a man can research things alone.e.g he discovered ai,electric cars,electric machines.

Body Paragraph 3:Many researchs should be carried by government,the fist reason is that they have infinite money for the researchs.They can buy anything that can help them for different researches.e.g. They build many government schools,collagas,universities, The other reason is their working staff.They pay their staff many high payments .This is why they work very hard and find many important researchs for them.e.g.If you give a payment of 50000 rupees to one person and give [redacted phone] to other person ,the high pay person work more hard then the other ,because he know that the companie should trust him.

In Conclusion,I think research should be carried by government beacause they have infinite money for their researchs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The candidate attempts to address all parts of the task by discussing private companies, individuals, and government bodies as funders of medical research. However, the development of ideas is limited and often disjointed. For instance, the paragraph arguing for individual researchers relies on extreme examples like Isaac Newton and Elon Musk, which do not realistically reflect modern medical research funding. Furthermore, the position taken shifts throughout the essay, ultimately concluding that the government should fund research because of infinite money, without sufficiently weighing the other options. While all prompt requirements are touched upon, the lack of coherent reasoning and superficial elaboration place this performance securely in the Band 5 category.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisational structure of the essay is heavily compromised. Although the student attempts paragraphing, the labels such as 'Body paragarph 1:' are included directly in the running text, and the formatting is severely disrupted by excessive spacing and lack of appropriate transitions. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in a mechanical and broken flow. Paragraphing is not used effectively to guide the reader through a logical progression of ideas. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the overall arrangement fails to present a unified, cohesive argument. This corresponds closely to the Band 4 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently impeded by major spelling and word-choice errors. Examples such as 'nowdays', 'carrued', 'brucial', 'collagas', and 'researchs' demonstrate a lack of control over basic word forms and plurals. While the student attempts less common items like 'consistency' and 'infinite money', these are often misused or misspelled. The lexical range is minimally adequate to convey a rudimentary message, but frequent inaccuracies and awkward collocations place the writing at a Band 4 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple and frequently faulty complex sentences. There are persistent errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation throughout the essay, such as 'Private companies were funded many medical research', 'When he is sitting behind a tree', and comma splices like 'Many researchs should be carried by government,the fist reason is that...'. These errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader in understanding the intended meaning. This level of control aligns with Band 4 descriptors.

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