Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Paragraph 1
Medical research projects are those which are done by researchers who are expert in doing various researches
on medical field and by those researches beneficial for patients in health issues .
Due to advancement of knowledge everything is done by evidence based.
Medical researchers play a great role in this field by helping health care system and public health.
Paragraph 2
In my opinion research should be done by government companies because government payed alot for research in medical field and alot of financial aid provide by government to employees.
Government strategies are authentic for any medical research and by international level these researches published.To many government companies and employees work great on doing research and make a health care system advance.By the passage of time and new advancements it's important to do new research on every field competitively it's our need .
Government companies give benefits to researcher's by giving them residency and family health insurance and monthly allowance.
Paragraph 3
Somehow research done by private companies make great full impact on international level because private companies more responsible then government in our country.Private companies give more strict time to researcher's to fulfill their work by time and more authentic researches. In medical research projects many private companies demand government funds for their projects and it's costly for private companies as compared to government.
Conclusion
Medical research projects in which researchers studied alot and write evidence based medicine and all stuff on diseases.Goverment research is more authentic and approved then private research.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt regarding who should fund medical research, leaning towards government funding while acknowledging private companies. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. The introduction spends too much time defining medical research rather than outlining a clear position. In the body paragraphs, points are asserted rather than fully extended, such as the vague mentions of government benefits and private company responsibility. While the writer covers parts of the task, the reasoning lacks depth and clarity, resulting in a superficial treatment of a complex topic. This places the performance firmly at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into four paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion. However, overall progression is weak. Paragraphs lack internal cohesion, and the connections between sentences are often abrupt or confusing, such as the transition in the second paragraph from government strategies to researcher benefits. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive structures like 'Research done by private companies' and 'Government companies'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard for the reader to follow the logical flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the conclusion is merely a single incomplete sentence. This meets the criteria for Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The lexical resource is limited and repetitive throughout the essay. The writer frequently reuses basic terms such as 'research', 'medical', 'government', and 'companies' without employing synonyms or varied phrasing. There are notable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'government companies' instead of government agencies, 'payed alot' (spelling and grammar), and 'great full impact' instead of significant impact. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic topic, noticeable errors in spelling, morphology, and word formation cause frequent difficulty for the reader and prevent the score from reaching a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is restricted, consisting primarily of simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. Frequent errors in grammar, punctuation, and sentence structure impede communication. Examples include run-on sentences and fragments, such as 'Due to advancement of knowledge everything is done by evidence based' and 'To many government companies and employees work great on doing research and make a health care system advance.' Subject-verb agreement errors, missing prepositions, and incorrect verb forms ('payed', 'researcher's') are pervasive. Because errors are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, the writing aligns with Band 4.0.
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