Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In the modern era best medical researches good for human begins life. Mostly private companies provide huge amount of funding the mainly purpose only to introduce best medical life. and i will give my own personal opinion for medical life which types of better public or establishment researching systems.

many people says, private companies comes to the medical field they better then government because they think private companies do best work in this field. In this technogical intellegence era they are more convinent to other thing In the America many private companies works day by day a lot of searches for human life medical cycle they are really good for individuals and other countries like Saudi Arabia, United Kingdom, Sweden they have are many private companies in the country they work great and daily they search new things like medicines, Surgery, heart trasplant and different types of Operations. I really believe private companies work better than governments this is my private mindset.

On the other hand mostly public says, government work better and fast to private search companies and establishment spent more money for searching humans medical life and they introduce daily new thing theses are betters for humans life they also sharply research for animals medicals life they give best and convenient life all over animals. European countries are very seriously researching for heart and other operation in these days this is a main reason mostly people says government research for medical life this is far better to private companies and I give my own opinion i like government searching some time like funding establishment pays more funding and far better amount to other private companies.

In conclusion, many people like individuals companies for researching and other side mostly public like government searching systems and my own thinking private companies is better than government for researching projects.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by discussing whether medical research should be funded by private companies or governments. A clear personal position is presented, as seen in statements like "I really believe private companies work better than governments." However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive. While the writer mentions examples such as the US, Saudi Arabia, and European countries, these points are underdeveloped and rely on over-generalizations rather than specific, well-supported arguments. Furthermore, the prompt also asks about "individuals," which is largely neglected in the text. Overall, the task is addressed only partially, placing this performance in the Band 5 category.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, including an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, the logical progression is weak and lacks a clear overarching structure. The use of cohesive devices is frequently mechanical, inaccurate, or confusing, such as "many people says, private companies comes to the medical field they better then government" and "On the other hand mostly public says." Referencing and substitution are frequently faulty, making it difficult to follow the flow of arguments between sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion fails to connect ideas smoothly, resulting in a performance that aligns with Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice errors that strain the reader. Examples include "medical researches good for human begins life" (human beings' lives) and "technogical intellegence era." The student attempts less common vocabulary such as "establishment" and "technological," but these are misused in context. Spelling mistakes (e.g., "trasplant," "convinent," "intellegence") and incorrect word forms are pervasive throughout the text. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying very basic thoughts, corresponding to a Band 4.0 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple sentences strung together with punctuation errors or conjunctions. When the student attempts complex sentences, they are almost invariably faulty and ungrammatical, such as in "Mostly private companies provide huge amount of funding the mainly purpose only to introduce best medical life." Subject-verb agreement errors, tense inconsistencies, and missing articles occur in nearly every sentence. These frequent errors severely impede communication and prevent the reader from easily understanding the intended meaning, placing the grammar firmly in the Band 4.0 bracket.

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