Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

In these days private companies give funds to many medical research projects.medical researches is good thing for our future.

Medical researche is better plan for securing our future because of this we do many things like more experiments in plants ,animals and humns.When we research on plants than we know about plants why they are too much better for our health and after animal research we know about animals organs and how they eat ,how they digest and how they produced a baby and after research on humans we know about the system of humans and how there organs is working and there are more medical researches like this.

In my opinion,government should pay funds for the medical researche because some times private companies dont have inaf funds .Medical researches in more important for better future of us these researches give us more knowledge about our life and about medical science .Medical research tell us how life is working ,plants life ,animals life and human life .Some medical researches wants more funds but individuals and private companies dont have more funds to pay and beacuse of lack of funds some researchs is stops and this is not a good thing for our lifes.

For instant,Our college principle annouce a medical research on plants but our college have no resorces then our principle take some funds from our government than after funds we did research on plants and this research give more knowledge to aur college and some students also come in our college for seeing the results of our research and some people write article on our research.

To conclude,medical researches is best for our future .we should do medical researches more and more for more knowledge.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing who should fund medical research, ultimately expressing the opinion that the government should take responsibility because private companies and individuals may lack sufficient funds. However, the development of ideas remains quite limited and repetitive. For instance, the student mentions researching plants, animals, and humans as broad justifications without deeper elaboration or specific real-world examples. Instead, the supporting example relies on a personal anecdote about a college principal and government funding. While the prompt allows for personal experience, the argument lacks the analytical depth and range of ideas expected at higher bands. The conclusion simply restates the premise. Consequently, the performance aligns best with the Band 5 descriptor, where ideas are somewhat limited and under-developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is organized into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which gives it an overall structural arrangement. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by mechanical and repetitive transitions like 'and after', 'how they', and 'Medical research tell us'. Cohesive devices are used in a very basic and sometimes inaccurate manner, such as 'For instant' instead of 'For instance'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs often relies on repetitive sentence stems rather than fluid referencing. There is a lack of sophisticated logical flow between sentences. These features place the response firmly in Band 4 to Band 5, and it fits the Band 4 descriptor well due to the basic, repetitive nature of the links and frequent lack of clear progression.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, highly repetitive, and relies heavily on elementary terms such as 'medical research', 'good thing', 'future', and 'funds'. There are frequent word-form and spelling errors throughout the text, including 'researche' for research, 'humns' for humans, 'inaf' for enough, 'resorces' for resources, and 'principle' for principal. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a rudimentary message, the lack of control over common words and the severe absence of less common lexical items prevent the response from achieving a higher score. It strongly reflects the Band 4 descriptor, where vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and errors strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly coordinated with excessive use of 'and'. Attempts at more complex structures lead to severe structural breakdowns and frequent errors, such as 'when we research on plants than we know about plants why they are too much better' and 'how there organs is working'. Punctuation is largely neglected, with frequent missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and improper spacing around punctuation marks. Grammatical errors are dense and constant, often distorting meaning and causing significant difficulty for the reader. These characteristics correspond directly to the Band 4 descriptor.

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