Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Private companies are funded for the medical research projects in nowdays. you are agree from this statemen that this fund should be provide to any person or by the government.
In the present, many private companies provides huge payment for the medical research projects which have a huge success and a lot of money and have a great reputation.These private companies gives funded for get a big success in the future. But it provide less income to own workers which is very detrimental way.And it is possible from this factor when it gives huge amount to medical institudes.
On the other hand, if a person paid this kind of fund neverthless he could not get a success because he did not have enough money and that's why he cannot afford this fund.If government gives these fuded for medical research projects and i think it can take a better palace and get a huge achievement.
Government should do this fund because it have a lot of money and it contributed with other countries and that also helps their and it take taxes on everythings fro, the publics. If government take this kind of reaction they will do get successs in any moment.
In the conculsion, and my prespectations and my opinions, government should have to providing funded to medical research projects.If a privates company or institude gives this kind of fund then it connot get success.If a person have a lot of money then his should gives funded for medical research projects.Otherwise in my opinion, this is resposibilty of government and its should have provides every funded.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing whether medical research should be funded by private companies, individuals, or the government, attempting to form a position that the government should take responsibility. However, the development of ideas is limited and at times unclear. The writer mentions points such as private companies seeking success and profit, but the reasoning becomes confused when discussing workers' income and institutes. Similarly, the points regarding individual funding and government taxation lack clear, coherent support. While the student attempts to express ideas throughout the text, the arguments remain underdeveloped, and some statements are repetitive or obscure. Therefore, the response aligns best with Band 5 descriptors for Task Achievement, as it covers the prompt only partially with limited idea development and a fluctuating position.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay demonstrates some basic organization with paragraph breaks, but there is no clear overall progression of arguments. Cohesive devices are used minimally or inaccurately, such as abrupt transitions between sentences ('In the present, many private companies provides...', 'On the other hand, if a person paid...'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical connections between ideas. For instance, pronouns like 'it' and 'this' often lack clear antecedents, causing confusion about whether the writer refers to the government, companies, or the funding itself. Repetition is also present, particularly in the conclusion, which further disrupts the flow. These characteristics place the response firmly at Band 4, as information and ideas are not arranged in a sufficiently coherent manner.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive throughout the essay. The student frequently reuses terms such as 'fund', 'medical research projects', 'money', and 'success' without demonstrating a wider lexical range. There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'gives funded', 'take a better palace', and 'take this kind of reaction'. Spelling errors also occur, such as 'nowdays', 'institudes', 'fuded', 'conculsion', 'prespectations', and 'resposibilty'. While the intended meaning can occasionally be discerned, the limited range and frequent inaccuracies cause difficulty for the reader and strain comprehension. Consequently, the response satisfies the criteria for Band 4 in Lexical Resource.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical structures attempted are largely restricted to basic forms, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are persistent errors in subject-verb agreement ('private companies provides', 'government should do this fund because it have'), tense usage, and article placement ('the government', 'a private company'). Punctuation and capitalization are also unreliable, as seen in sentences starting with lowercase letters and run-on structures. These frequent errors disrupt the flow of reading and occasionally distort the intended meaning. Because the range of structures is very limited and errors are frequent across the text, the performance corresponds to Band 4.
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