Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays, many medical research projects are funded by private companies. In your opinion, do you think that research should be carried by private companies, individuals or government?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

introduction; Currently private firms are fainacialy supported to mrdical research studies i belive that resarch should be carried by government firns because government have stricts rules and ragulation .govrnment also supported the poor peoples. In this essay i will dicuss briefly which best for country.

paragrafh 1 ; private firms ; Private firms have more fainancial support because private firms have big investers thats why they can not faced any fainacial problems. They have a big and tallented team and modern . they also have a techinal instruments for resarches. they prevent new medicens and treatments.private firms do many resarches because they have many funds. but they focused on profit not think that this medicene is out of range for poor peoples.

paragraf 2; Individual firms ; invidual firms have many fainacial problems because they do not have many investers. they have a small team and few instrument for researching projects . they do have modern technology due to fainacial problems .they can not produce better quality of medicene also.

paragrafh 3; government firms ; Government firms have fainacial support because they get taxes from country peoples. they also did not faced fainacial problems. they have best instruments for researches and large team for working on new treatments and medicence.they also consider poor people.they made medicenes in affordable prices . so that poor peoples also take all medicine. they have strict rules and regulations.

conclusion;Thats why i belive that research should be carried by government firms

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to address the task question regarding who should fund medical research by comparing private firms, individuals, and the government. However, the position is somewhat simplistic, and the ideas are under-developed, relying on repetitive points about financial backing and pricing for the poor. Furthermore, the response suffers from a critical length issue, as it contains only 246 words, thus failing to meet the minimum requirement of 250 words. This under-length naturally pulls down the task achievement score, resulting in a partial and limited coverage of the prompt. Examples of under-developed ideas include the brief treatment of individual firms and the repetitive mentions of government regulations and taxes.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks conventional structural flow and correct formatting. The student includes explicit headers like 'paragrafh 1 ; private firms ;' and 'conclusion;', which disrupts the natural progression of ideas. Paragraphing is chaotic, with the introduction and conclusion poorly integrated. While there is a basic logical progression moving from private firms to individuals and finally to the government, the mechanical and faulty use of cohesive devices, along with the lack of appropriate paragraphing conventions, severely hinders the overall coherence of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms such as 'fainacialy' (financially), 'resarches', 'medicene', and 'peoples'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'mrdical', 'firns', 'ragulation', 'inverters', 'tallented', 'techinal', and 'medicens'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic gist of the arguments, the frequent errors and lack of sophisticated phrasing restrict the lexical score to a band 4.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or poorly constructed compound sentences, and punctuation is largely ignored (e.g., lowercase letters at the start of sentences and after periods in several instances). There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('government have', 'government also supported') and incorrect pluralisation ('peoples'). These frequent errors and the lack of complex sentence control noticeably strain the reader.

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